Foggy Capes

A poem about loneliness and that dark terrible feeling you sometimes think about at night.

Foggy Capes

Its a graveyard shift type of feeling,

Charred footnotes by the dumpster.

Oh mother dearest I've walked so far today.

Amongst the shadows, 

I stood with them inside of a circle

Heads plastered on sticks 

Running on bare feet

Stepping on angel hair..

My heart has been looking for so long

For a place where I will finally belong.

On this sunday afternoon

I felt so menacing 

I didn't mean to cut you 

Or hurt your feelings. 

By the briar I felt a comforting

As rigid as a preachers hand

Trying to pulling me back,

From the sorry solitude 

I was so eager to become.

But not even the cross can save me

I've become something else.

Built upon the darkness. 

Reminiscing of what I felt 

On that foggy day 

By the harbour. 

Author's Note

Reviews

[L. Edward Neale]

Always an emotive experience to read one of yours. Tinges of meloncholia. Eloquent as usual. And the ending that just hangs for a long time in the memory. Makes me want to go back and figure exactly what he felt that day, a mixture of emotions. I was looking at the emotional content, then I read it again and realised it could be the lament of some gothic creature of the night, like a lycan or a vamp savouring the tase of his first feeding. Levels and then levels.

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[Dayran]

Doing something from a point between reality and dream doesn't always provide a clear indication of ourselves. It comes much later in the shape and form we understand.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the place you took me with you in the poem. A dark and lonely journey. I like the description and the desire place in the poem.
"But not even the cross can save me
I've become something else."
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Owlgirl]

Nicely worded! Thanks for the request :)

[V.J.C.]

I really like this piece, thank for the read.

[Laura Maidah]

"it's" needs an apostrophe in the first line.

[Celestial Witch Child]

Your writing intrigues me so. Great piece.

[Laura Maidah]

It's also missing commas.

[Fran Scholan]

Interesting imagery, and very sad. Any poem that brings pictures to the reader's mind is a masterpiece in my book. Well done.

[Pax]

nice, i like the flow and the images of the foggy..
one thing i found awkward to read:
'Trying to pulling me back'
maybe your trying to say
'Trying to pull me back'
otherwise i enjoyed reading this..keep it up