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A return of sorts to my old poetry style. Inspired by the night sky.

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Take a picture of the moon,

So you know what if feels like to be weak. 

It will come in tiny pixels,

Propelled by vibrations of colour

And stained in a smoke screen.

Ask yourself if its worth the memory space

Ask yourself if it should be erased. 

The answer will always be the same. 

The nighthawks will be stagnant in the background, 

Their wings stretched out and frozen. 

The blood soaked clouds enrich the horizon, 

As the mountain peaks flourish,

And the milky way spills over the skyline. 

I'd like to think that theres some kind of life up there,

Something else to share this beauty,

Hovering over oblivion. 

But in the end that only makes me feel sad.

Lonely.

Brittle. 

Insignificant. 

I don't want to feel like that. 

I don't want to feel weak...

So I press delete

Reviews

[Dean Kuch®]

The descriptive narrative you used in this were stunningly beautiful to me. A photograph may seem insignificant to millions as they happen across it in a newspaper or online. But, to the photographer who snapped it, that image, frozen eternally in time and space, spoke something monumental and profound to them. It has a history behind it to them and carries along with it baggage stuffed with memoris. At least until it is...deleted.

[Sean]

Whatever they said. Another excellent poem. Fascinating concept. I've never thought about it like that before, or at least consciously. You described it very well!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

The picture painted is worth a million words.

[Dayran]

A combination of the self, nature and technology that refers to the universe for something in the way of clarity to describe the experience. Exquisite!

[V.J.C.]

This is a very stunning poem that has lovely description. The words create a scene in my head that I always love to see when reading something. Thank you for the great read.

[Laura Maidah]

"Take a picture of the moon,
So you know what if feels like to be weak. " OMGOMGOMG

"So I press delete" last line was an epic fail, the only fault in this delicacy.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description of the moon and the photo gave life to the purpose of the poem.
"Lonely.
Brittle.
Insignificant.
I don't want to feel like that. "
Thank you for the excellent poem. All of us will know loneliness in a life.
Coyote

[Pax]

very nice, love the ending part.

[Adam, the Grub Street L..]

I like

'Take a picture of the moon,
So you know what if feels like to be weak.
It will come in tiny pixels, '

but have to say I don't really like the rest.

I love the concept of taking a photo of the moon and the camera being completely inefficient to the task.

It's perfect, I live near a recycling plant in the middle of a smoky, grimy city and the clouds are often incredible beautiful because of that, but never come out n photos.

I love how that links to the inability of ever capturing that beauty but I think you go to down with it. Just because we can't freeze the beauty doesn't mean we can't experience it. Indeed we can experience it better by not trying to capture it, the beauty of something is a shifting moving thing. The sounds, sights and smells all add to the beauty, as does our state of mind and memory, though imperfect, can capture the ghost of that feeling better than a camera ever could.

So I don't like the poem because I think you go to down and sad with it. The beauty is there and can be appreciated, but it can't be pickled, which I think is a good thing, a cause of celebration. I would end feeling grand, proud that I can experience beauty by stepping out my front door.

Hooray that we can't capture the moon in our little camera because it will keep us looking at the real thing and appreciating it.

That said, those first three lines are great.

[Serenity Faith]

If it was your intentions or not, I'm not sure, but I like the effect of writing smaller towards the end, giving an even bigger image to the words at hand. Starting bold, then fading into your weakness. Wonderful.

[Kathryn]

Wow. Love the simplicity and the complexity of this piece.