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alt title: "apple head"

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i don't breathe around you

i hold my heart in my throat until

the moment where it beats too much

and completely pushes my adam's apple up

and then, like eve in the garden, i swallow sin

whole 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[TheRaven]

Shyness. Awe? A lot to wonder about the feeling. Nervousness. Another feeling of love perhaps, a feeling of yearning and desire so intense we feel our heart coming out of our chest. So much to say, so much we want to say, but then: we swallow all the words whole. The eve reference was wonderfully used in a refreshing manner, not cliched (or not too cliched). Well used! I wonder, is it swallowing our desire or are we being sinful by being silent and not letting the apple out?

You've made me think, and from such a short piece I appreciate it immensely. If the next pieces are as good as the first two you have a great series on hand here.

[Samantha Lynn]

I really like this one. It is short, but says so much. The connection of the apple and the story of Adam and Eve is strong for me. I think this is one of my favorites.

[Matching Socks]

Oh those sinful thoughts, swallowed.
Really like this one a lot.

[hellfolia]

this one really hits home for me, and it is amazing how your words have such a powerful effect even with so few of them. very striking, very inspiring, you have a real talent here, thank you for sharing

[Dayran]

A powerful portrayal of the experience of awe.

[Barbara Walker]

Very creative, Cole. Great flow and imagery

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Creative words here! Thank you for sharing!

[poetdoug]

Wonderful work of art Cole. I love to dod Haiku poems for that reason. They are brief, but to the point. Great job.
Thannks
Doug

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong ending to the amazing poetry. You create situation with a proper ending. Thank you Cole for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lorraine Montez]

Perfect! Concise, clear delivery. Just enough words and a fabulous last line: "like Eve in the garden, I swallow sin whole". Snare, snare...bass. Lands just right.