Swell

its time to step out of my cubby-space posture. "god" on our eyelids.

Swell: 

Effervescent scripture 

pouring from reamed mouths. 

A vast swell -- 

LIMITLESS. The line of sprawled 

wings. A countless crow murder

wrapping around the lineage of

power lines. 

My bedroom window. 

Athirst eyes lie on its

prey -- a rodent(X) splattered by the                                 F(x)= rodent   G(x)= Sympathy.   FoG = Human. 

sun's shadow.                                                              

Porcelain beaks,

whistling. A clamour of stretching flesh --

The fervid frenzy of feeding 

time. 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Steven]

An equation! I see the swell as hypocrisy. An interesting image: dead crow to dead crow, on their backs, wings spread flat against the street, as far as the eye can see. It's relevance? Perhaps all of the victims of the former hypocrisy. My bedroom window--crossed out. A modern device. We say or write something, and at times, feel shamed about it, embarrassed, and so cross it out. This speaks to me of shame on the other side of that glass. Now the equation... It is not clear, other than that "sympathy" can replace "a rodent." The little o, as opposed to simply reading "fog," could be one of the signs for multiplication. "Rodents" and "Sympathy" multiplying into one another, because of one another, the result of one another. Now are these crows turned into mice in the grass. A different sort, but the same. And again we have the stretching flesh, the multiplied victims in the wake of the predator's mouth. A profound web of a piece, and at times, very delicate--sore, almost, like a wound still red.

[Mockingbird]

dark and somewhat chilling.

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of the language. Allowed reader's to fall in the strong statements. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Corset]

This does feel a bit eerie, a bit vampiric, a bit deja vue, The top stanzas seem ecstatic the bottom seem to contradict past the power line "my bedroom window"
fantastic in its way of suggesting, yet kinda unnerving as well by what seems a multiple choice insert as rodent.

[That_Guy]

felt somewhat eerie, well done. I love your word choice, as always. Do you thesaurus swap or just dig deep into your vocabulary?

[Laura Maidah]

Athirst is really cool. Like "aglitter" or "aglaze". Made up words really hit home sometimes, like in your case. NIce!