Real Estate

I wanted to try something simple. No over complexed diction. Just humble.

Real Estate 

You see that house on the hill

you know I go there as I will

I've been there for 13 years, but still

Its not my home

I realize this is a temporary place

just my afterbirths hanging aftertaste 

giving me another year to just waste

planted in the carpet. 

Living in a cutout

Theres another house miles away

in there I will one day stay

and if I get my very own way

It will be my home

I realize this is a processing memory

lying on the axis of symmetry 

in the graph of the housing industry

on a tangent line

Living in a cutout

standing upright

Author's Note

Reviews

[Peaceworker22]

Makes me want to move out even more. : C

[Destructive Impulse]

I like it and I like the music. I really like the album cover.

[Tate Morgan]

This is your best work so far

[Zachary_James]

I thought this was briliant, it is different from anything you've wrote before. You did a fantastic job Cole.

[Corset]

This reminds me of Nina Simone's "House on the Hill". I love the theme, living in a cut out, and the emotional message of where there is love there is a home, that someday will be your own. All stanzas brilliant, love it from the word you on down to upright :) great write!

[Androglossia]

The earlier part of this write implies the character's prevailing view of his present shelter. In this process it is aparrent that he doesn't have the pleasure of living that house thus the transition to his ideal home, his dream house. The 4th stanza in the other hand challenged my understanding. I think the word axis of symmetry in mathematics is a line that divides the graph into two perfect halves thus dividing the view/thinking of the character between his current situation and his future plans. This has been aparrent in the division of POV's between the first and the second stanzas. This could also mean your own POV of the current Real Estate Market trends not only in the US but around the world which could result a long discussion if I had to dig deeper:)

Eventhough you were trying to use simpler choice of words in this poem, for me it isn't as simple as what it seemed. Nice try, lol.

[Coyote Poetry]

Good music and poetry. I like the band a lot. Home is a hard word. We learn where home is when we are far away fro the place of safety and peace. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lost in Wonderland]

Just because you live in a house doesn't mean its home. Nice poem with depth in its simplictity:)
God Bless