All The Things We Almost Had

Terribly dark underneath the surface.

All The Things We Almost Had

Brushed with the aurulent skyline 

The bruises on my arms turn into silver streaks 

Clinging to the edge of the atmospheres tarnished smoke screen. 

The blossoms underneath shiver with anguish

As the clouds begin to take me pass their parted gates 

Heaving me through the humid despondency soaked air. 

And everything became so very quiet all of a sudden 

You could hear yourself dematerialize through the floor.

I could feel my atoms split without any despair

Circling the dusky horizon like they had somewhere else to be

All while the sun radiated through the angelic haze 

I've heard all the folklore that sprinkled this velvety plane 

The cries of sanctuary that riddled its beautiful melody 

Keeping everybody planted in its formless mountains. 

I know that sometimes things are too good too be true

But maybe I can just rest my eyes here for a little while longer.. 

Author's Note

This happens to be one of my more darker pieces. Its just dressed up with pretty words to disconnect from what it actually means.

Reviews

[Serenity Faith]

Okay so this piece just became my new favorite by you. I could picture everything, if that makes sense. Like if I took the song and your descriptions in the poem, I could make one hell of a rewound slow motion music video. Picture this...You're looking at yourself in the mirror, then your image steps out and faces you, and you and your doppelganger fight. Halfway through, your image "Dematerializes through the floor" and you break away bit by bit. Suddenly it's like someone hit fast forward and everything comes back together, and ends with you looking in the mirror like at the beginning. UGH! I so wish I had the brain power, video and photography skills, and money right now. I'd make you one wicked video. Sorry for the random trip into my mind. It was just what came to me after reading this ^_^ Brilliant Cole!

[Jazique]

Wow ... give me a second I can do better wow (Opera voice.) I'll admitt it could you use a tweek but, their are definitely some things you deserve a thumbs up for, especially the descriptions and the flow it has connecting it together.

[SmileBig :)]

I really like this! It's deep, and a bit dark, but good :) keep writing!

[Yheela]

"You could hear yourself dematerialize through the floor." - out of body experience?
I like the spaced out, not quite there feel of this poem.
We can't always cope with "real life", but eventually we all need to return.