prayer in a birdcage

oh, this routine! this damned routine!

it crawls like a wax-covered fly in november

over hairless skin and twisted horns

and the voices of the watching

these days there are parameters

and mediators and the like but

i have never been one for structure.

let's leave order for the orderly and

discord for the holy men.

 

none of us will be happy to hear the following but

there is no god if he can be controlled by

prayer and woodwork and television

doesn't that defeat the purpose of a god,

if he can only exist within a rusted birdcage?

i personally do not agree with his methods but

i can respect his apparent intellect

it is advertised frequently and spoken highly of

in bars and jails and war camps and yes,

even churches but

miracles cannot be born into a world of

iron and structure, doesn't anyone

see that?

Author's Note

Once again, I limited the punctuation here, so it flows more like a thought. At least I like to think so.

Reviews

[Juliet]

Wow. This piece is powerful and really makes a person think. I believe you leaving out some of the punctuation served its purpose. It's a brilliant thought at that.

"i personally do not agree with his methods but
i can respect his apparent intellect"

You seem so wise beyond your years. It's hard for me to believe you're sixteen. So good. :) Great writing.

[Rene Velez]

really powerful structure and it reads as so, thought provoking and challenging to some...nice one Cole

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is beautiful, and even I can see that as an avowed disbeliever.