this is an apology

i got heart, i guess.

maybe not much.

but it's there,

between my tits.

 

i been called pretentious,

pompous,

even a chauvinist.

and i been thinkin' about it

real hard,

hard as i can.

it's about time for a

change.

 

i know what

"sorry"

means.

i know when to use it,

and how,

like a handgun you keep

on the top shelf in your closet.

 

i'll pull it out now,

ignorin' the caliber and

the inner workings.

 

i'm pullin' the trigger.

 

don't you dodge this bullet.

Author's Note

A public apology. I guess I am a little pretentious, as I've been accused of being. Just trying to cool the flames a bit.

Reviews

[JelliFyshKissUs]

I wished to review this because I truly love it. I'm being genuine here. THIS is poetry. Not because of the apology, but because of the heart splattered all over the page. You bleed these words with deepest thought. The allegorical reference to the gun is perfection, and the last line.... genius. I give praise when it is due. I knew you had the potential to present this site with a work such as this. We just needed to wash off all the condescension and let that gem shine.

No one hates you, dear. Only wish to pull you out of those clouds and settle you down here with us. Love the heart in this. Superb job.

[Kenneth The Poet]

And how are you pretentious? Has good work become that or something?

Seriously, you write good s**t.

[LadyNaida]

Wow! I can just see you in the apologetic mode..take it or leave it. I would except the apology just as long as the reason for it does not repeat itself. Lol! Great write!

[Emily B]

ready, aim, fire!

[Proletariat Uprising]

You need to apologize for being talented, and making us hacks feel terrible. You also need to apologize to all major publishing companies for not being published by any, because you're costing them zillions of potential dollars from sales of your work.

[The]

On a personal note, it isn't the poet/reviewer who should be concerned with pretention and decadence. Also too, it is not the responsibility of the poet to create topics that pander to an audience, or to defer from genuine material/sentiments that may/may not be offensive only because they may offend someone. W.H. Auden once said "Some writers confuse authenticity, which they ought always to aim at, with originality, which they should never bother about." Certainly pretention isn't originality, but it is the poet's duty to remain authentic. If others perceive your work and/or opinions, it is not the fault of the artist but that of the audience not properly tuned to the sensitivities required to understand the work at hand.

Your poem is solid, best I've read of the 15 works so far. It has a strong message, eficiency of expression, and is undeniably authentic; and while I may disagree with the reason of your apology, I cannot doubt the sentiment and voice behind the apology. Well done.

Best of luck with your future writings.

--CB