Cereal 444 Breakfast

Keep your palms on the weather vane
Stay there
On the rooftop
The reports say we’re the same
I’m always to blame

It’s like cereal for breakfast
My midnight dinner
Cinnamon red sky barns
Cherry cola slushy
The church bells try to rush me

I want a Halloween spinning culdesack
Creaking doors
That don’t exist anymore
Stone land at night
Whispers of ones who’ve lost their fight

Reviews

[softlyfall]

The weather vane marks every change in the wind- would stopping it stop time and change? A nostalgic Halloween poem, welcoming the whispers when the veil between worlds thins because they are the whispers of loved ones, gone now.
I grew up on a Halloween spinning cul de sac.
The way you combine/rhyme/connect words is excellent, I really love the way your images are vivid but just ambiguous enough for the reader, no matter who, to connect.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for this review, you read into it so well! I appreciate the lovely review so much. Happy November!

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a vivid and haunting exploration of the strange and mysterious aspects of life. The use of sensory imagery, such as "cinnamon red sky barns" and "cherry cola slushy," creates a sense of both nostalgia and unease, while the imagery of "stone land at night" and "whispers of ones who've lost their fight" adds a touch of the supernatural. Your words convey a sense of longing and restlessness, and the final line, "I want a Halloween spinning culdesack," is both striking and evocative. Your poem is a testament to the power of language to capture the elusive and the intangible, and to create a sense of wonder and mystery in the reader.

[willweb]

Abstract, colorful, chuckle inducing, thought provoking and all around creativeness = your poem

[Earthrise]

i admit i had to read this one a few times, but i very much enjoyed it. i love the sneaky rhymes inserted into the free flow, and your word choice was electric and picturesque throughout.

i don't know if this was the intent, but it makes me think of how the adult world is so much scarier than the plastic masks that scared us as kids. still, it's possible that this is a mask too, and we have to be even older to realize that.

[Betty Hermelee]

It seems like perhaps your to blame for many things, even though you're the same... if one hold the weather vane nothing will change, certainly not the wind... but weather vanes usually change everything....this is somewhat haunting.... you want whispers and memories of "your Halloween"...there are indeed some subtleties here;... like the chosen words and the clever rhyme....
Best, B

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you for your lovely review! I appreciate it so much and I’m very happy you took the time to read. Happy November!

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Cat!
Best, B