Such A Trigger

I remember those days

Rotting oranges
Fermentation in my brain
And bugs in my heart
Sickly yellow and pale blue
The savor of salt
And the lies
Plastic medicine and fruit flies
And no one asked why
I could’ve died
And I don’t want to go any further
It’s such a trigger
A renegade is involved
And my head is my own puzzle to solve
They’re not quite as worried
I guess that makes sense
I’ve always been scared, always been phobic
It’s just one of those things
With a sad sting

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like the proffered wordage here. The content is certainly dispiriting, perhaps even despairing. It's one of those things that make you want to clap a friend on the back and say, There, there, it's going to be okay, when you've no idea of whether it will be okay or not. At any rate, it was a good read and I don't wish to set off any triggers. Those blasted "renegades" seem to wreak a bit of havoc in everyone's life at one point or another.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much. I appreciate your kind in depth review more than I can say. (:

[Fabian G. Franklin]

My pleasure.

[duff]

"Fermentation in my brain
And bugs in my heart"

Such a description of rot and the erosion of anything left of origin. There is no hiding when you write like this and its for the better. Well done. Brave writing.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I really appreciate this comment. Thank you so much. (:

[Jenni Bailey]

Awesome choice of words! I loved it...its a tear-jerker, for sure

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! So appreciated. (:

[Betty Hermelee]

I know many of us have triggers that set us off believing we are sick whether it's true or not... we feel like rotting souls, heads spinning with pain, body aches, etc....yet some believe and assist, and others think we are crazy....I love the line" my head is my own puzzle to solve".... how true... in fact our pain comes from the brain... all the stings and burns and out of sink feelings. .. We all think of death when we believe or are truly ill....If you think you're ill then you are! very sad, but great writing!
Best, B

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I’m very glad you liked that particular line as I almost took it out! Thank you for such a sweet review as always. It’s so, so appreciated. (: have a wonderful day.

[Kim S.]

And my head is my own puzzle to solve
They’re not quite as worried
I guess that makes sense
I’ve always been scared, always been phobic
It’s just one of those things
With a sad sting

I JUST LOVED these lines here, such one amazing write, love the imagery

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I’m so glad you enjoyed

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

‘Rotting oranges
Fermentation in my brain ‘
That’s amazing those few lines
I can almost smell the rottenness
Great write ✍️ congratulations love it

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! Your review is so appreciated

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

You are most welcome 🙏