80’s Dream

‘Have respect, be that girl you can’t forget’- Hayley Kiyoko

Everything you do is so cool
Badass 80’s dream
I can’t focus
But I can’t pace
Because I’m not walking across the furniture store
To meet your precious face
I’ve got the chills
And I’m not ill
It’s just the thrill of the thought
That this may be the start

Isn’t she so cool?
Rebels break and bend
But she’s behind the screens
Making the rules
Setting the scene
A motherfucking machine
Being around her is like a lovely headlock

You’re a mystery
Dug up from the deepest part of the chlorine sea
Flowers grow through your overcoat
Millions of compliments through my throat

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

What a creative last stanza...
You make her cool....compliments stuck in the throat, she leaves the speaker speechless.

a lovely headlock...makes me think of the speaker wrestling with him or herself about approaching the subject.
She is in charge...sort of like my cat.
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Haha, thank you so, so much! I appreciate it, your review was amazing and so kind. (:

[M. J. Smith]

The 1980's! Now you're talking my past! I ran a thousand races on my bike. I challenged any cyclist with the guts to step forward. The street was my playground.
Ah! To be young again.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I’m glad this brought back some memories and i appreciate the review so much.

[M. J. Smith]

You are most welcome, my friend. The denim jacket, matching jeans, eagle t shirt, and cross necklace. The only thing I didn't sport was the eighties hair!. As a racer, I was blue denim badass! Stay warm and safe.

[Betty Hermelee]

a dream of struggle, of emotions, but she's cool! and this may be the start of something great; a mysterious person; not knowing what to expect from her, but she seems pretty strong "making the rules"; Glad that this is a dream. I like the last stanza as did Jacob, very strong!
Best, B

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the review so, so much.

[Kim S.]

I love that last stanza in this write, very well written write here

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was so original it rocked. The punchy lines drive it like a musical beat, taking us back to a former time and place where anything is possible. Great piece. I enjoyed.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you, so, so much. I’m so glad you liked it and your review was so kind!

[Ada]

This nostalgic write is centered on the 80s punk rock, rebel and outsider themes. I was in Jr high during this era so this reminded me of computer games and pizza parties. Thanks!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! That was exactly the idea I was trying to give off, thank you again. (:

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I like this one. It really makes me wonder who this her is. The title also makes me think it's a movie you're talking about. You make her sound so real and alive. I wished it never ended. Wonderful poem, as always. I enjoyed reading your art. tyfs

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for review. I appreciate it as always, it means so much (:

[Chris Shaw]

Highly creative. The she here is her own girl with sass. I really like the final stanza. It is quite clear that she has her eyes on someone. I wonder where this is going to go? That's what I was left thinking. Thank you Vertigo Cat. Love cats you know.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! Yes, cats are amazing, haha (: thank you again

[Lisasview]

After reading and reviewing one of your poems
I read what you wrote in the Author section and I see that you are telling stories through poetry.. So I got that right!
Being in charge and owning what we do in life is so important. As we get older we get better at doing this.
This poem was so interesting.. The words you used made it so..
headlock and chorine sea..wonderful words and make your poem-story so visual.. Lisa

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Yes, you got it spot on! Thank you so much for the kind review, I really appreciate it so, so much (: