Out Of Order

‘The whole world is letting me down’- Lorde

My hearts racing
My bloods pumping
But still
Under the silver sky
I continue to feel nothing
How much ink did I use last night?
Celebrating on the train tracks
And running from flashlights
My heart told me to mark the time
But I did it all out of order
I’m just so glad this time next year
The war will be over
Raise a glass of foam
To our world alone

This is the first everlasting dawn I’ve ever had
When I lost all feeling in my ribs you helped me stand
On a beach with the brightness turned all the way up
The piano nor the violin
I’ll never get enough
My tower
My stars favorite hours
I’ll name every holiday after you
The window
Just like the mirror
Will close forever

After all
What were we reflecting?
If I can just reach for that horizon
Maybe I can write again sometime
Says phoebe calls in the winter
They wanna know your heart won’t stay splintered
Every step in the cave is a guitar strum to my ears
A slap in the
In the ugly face of all my fears

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

first two lines missing apostrophes...
but wow, this is really good...the rib part, the heart not staying splintered.
A slap in the ugly face of fears...yes, they do have ugly faces, and I think what scares us more than the fears is the fact we have them in the first place.
What makes uneasy enough to have them.

I don't know if our world deserves a toast right now, but we can still drink to surviving in it.

j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much. I appreciate the kind review as always! Thank you (:

[Betty Hermelee]

It seems like your soul, your inner self is out of order, just like most of us these days, with the world as it stands. It's like we have come to a halt; the things we used to do, we cannot. Maybe next year will be better.. "I continue to feel nothing"... "If I just search for the horizon".. maybe there is hope. There is such fear shrouding you. You cannot write, "But maybe I can write again sometime"...I feel as if I'm trapped...in the ugly face of all my fears."
Excellent write.
Best, B

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Wow, such a write so full of emotion, enjoyed this....

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! It’s much appreciated (: