The End

‘There’s no place like my room’- Phoebe Bridgers

You drove us home
Bought hot chocolate and kept us warm
It’ll be the most surreal Christmas morning
The sky’s as worn out as a kids favorite book
Every young word
Every brilliant idea reflecting in the brook
Back then it was so easy
But do these pages still need me?

We remain
In the deepest corner of the diner
The night sky and digital stars are spinning
And you’re still whistling
Every trumpet ever played
Is what it feels like being on stage

And the cacti has all been struck
And the town is talking about the dark clouds
They’ll know about the world alone
But they’ll never come in as long as I’m around

It’s storming and the top is down
We got lost in California acting like clowns
It’s all gonna be okay
Is what the twinkling red moon says
A volcano full of dust
Forgiving clovers and a lane
Coffee and a bitter taste
Life feels so much cleaner
I wish I could relive those few golden days
There something’s scary about how you won’t come around

There was something about 2021
A restart of all the fun

Watching that glass break
It still really really hurts
It reminded me of the me before I met you
Falling forever
But I think it’s finally coming together
Every lyric
Every chorus is melting
And I’m on the mend
I’ll dethrone that damn king
I’ll be the best usurper anyone has ever seen

I want the credits
I want the points
Or I’ll blow this joint
Bubbles reflect California night
God, it was beautiful
I wanted to see the Christmas lights with you
I just think there’s something about you
Something hidden in you
That’s adorable!
They think a mangy homeless cat standing up for itself was treason, think it was horrible

And now my ribs are broke
The truth to make you choke
You’re sorta stupidly self aware
The day you left the day I learned you didn’t care
I wish I could remember this feeling forever
So I wouldn’t have another break down f*****g ever
It’s 11:11, make a wish
Another bag of tricks

I was living in the nightmare realm
The only one at the helm
And I think I’m losing my touch
After that sweet rush

This isn’t where the garden ends
We’ll meet again
make amends
And I don’t know if it’ll chime true
But I’m here with you

The world is about to be torn up
Good thing we have a backup

I wish the dawn would stay purple
For f*****g ever
So I wouldn’t have to have another damn breakdown ever
From the ashes of a rebellions ending
Realities are blending
And I’m the ruler, lord, king and queen
I’m sending the message out to the other lands
I’ve taken my dreams hand
While we watch the flames all choke in sand

I’m not your loyal subject anymore
I’m the vertigo you’ll feel forevermore

Author's Note

2022, you’ll get to see all of my poetry, bare bones. There’s stories to be told.

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

A very open and powerful poem. Greatly enjoyed the raw emotion. And I like your style. Unlike other free-style poets on this site, you get the point that a poetry line should be a full thought and not just chopped up because the line is getting long. So the flow of your words feels natural. And you are succinct in your words, we naurally lead to short line and powerful writing. The is no waste in your lines. And your break between stanzas is also natural and unforced. You know how to write in free verse, and make a powerful delivery.

All my best,

Rick

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you, so so much. This poem means so much to me. When people enjoy the way I set it up and the flow, it’s an incredible feeling, like I’m the writer always wanted to be, lol . Thank you for leaving such a kind review and reading such a long poem. Endlessly appreciated (:

[Katarzyna Anna Koziorow..]

I really like your workshop. I needed some time to understand the message of your poem, but it was worth reading it to the end. It is excellent, the metaphors are impressive. I will keep coming back here. You have a great talent. Greetings!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate the review more than I can say.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I had a gut feeling that this was going to be a pretty epic read, and what a revelation it was!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate the wonderful review endlessly. (:

[Ken Simm.]

I honestly felt enraptured by this. I will have to return there is so much here. Layer upon storied layer filled with such memorable concepts. Extraordinary.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much. I can’t say enough what that means to me, thank you for such a wonderful review. (:

[Sami Khalil]

This is volcanic. Powerful with molten lava. So straightforward and honest. Every stanza unfold into a new reality. An excellent poem indeed.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much. You really understood it spot on and I appreciate the kindness so much. (:

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Good to know. You are so welcome.

[Re-Pete]

wow. there's so much here to digest. ends usher new beginnings. very real and honest with a strong spirited touch. some great, memorable lines -

Every chorus is melting
And I’m on the mend
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I wish the dawn would stay purple (my favorite)

very well written with depth of feeling. powerful stuff ... :)

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for such a wonderful review. You really got it, thank you again. (:

[Neville]

............ yes indeed, this is a fine example of why I first fell in love with this most beautiful of crafts :)

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Oh my goodness, thank you so, so much. What a wonderful, kind review, I appreciate it endlessly.

[Neville]

you are so much more than merely welcome .. my pleasure entirely :)

[Miss Sharon]

Well now....this is what REAL poetry looks like! (I’ve taken my dreams hand While we watch the flames all choke in sand I’m not your loyal subject anymore I’m the vertigo you’ll feel forevermore) A perfect closure to a perfect write! ~Sharon

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for such a kind review. It was wonderful and I appreciate your kindness so much. (:

[Miss Sharon]

Oh you are most welcome! You have great talent...please use it well. ~Sharon

[William Michael Reeves]

Reminded me of the me before I met you. I love that line! I would like to know which planet is our back up planet? I guess every plan has an et in it. I like your wordplay in this poem and felt like I was taken on an adventure through relationships and time and place.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much. (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear poet. You bled to the paper. Made the reader believe and see your words.
"This isn’t where the garden ends
We’ll meet again
make amends
And I don’t know if it’ll chime true
But I’m here with you"
I understand the above lines and I learn. You can never return to the same place again. Everything had changed. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much for the kindness and the review. It’s always so appreciated (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Keep that vertigo spinning like a ballerina among the stars. "I’ll dethrone that damn king
I’ll be the best usurper anyone has ever seen." Viva la revolucione! I enjoyed the read.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate it endlessly. (: