Forgotten Fairytale

‘No I can't believe it's coming true, I'm blind and waiting for you‘- Goo Goo Dolls

When we first fell 

We hated each other like there was venom in our names 

 And poison ivy in our veins 

 Win some, lose some It’s your game 

Now dear friend 

To the end 

 Stars shot into the sky 

You’ll always be mine 

Across the pink, purple  and blue 

Please always stay you 

 A football field

A starry shield

A whole army of past enemies

And just lost in that deep teal

Sandwiches at sunset

Don't got to sleep, we're not done yet

We scared the fish away

As the incense blows away

Honey sweet apples

Behind the barn

Hundreds of paper trees

Protecting me

Looking at the light at midnight

Fences breaking and bending in the boat

We catch hearts and stay afloat

The seasons change

Pink, green, orange

Snowing

Will this rotting kingdom ever believe me?

I know it's kinda dumb

But you got me under your thumb

You 

Always made me feel like a prince, a princess

Sunday stained canvas

You

Got me surrounded 

On all sides

The fire escape is slippery

The California blue sky

Made up of patches from the Renegade days

You were the missing phase

I could move on with you

The weekend where the song finally changed

You were a lost fairytale 

I went everywhere I could 

But you taught me to sail In all the macabre stories

Where they never lock pinkies in the end 

You’ve become my forgotten fairytale, best friend 

The labyrinth I don’t remember And all the shattered embers changed

A new memory to look forward to

I'll let go of my cape on the way down

Sinking to the bottom with you

Thank you for being my new ocean blue

Author's Note

This is a reworked version of an old piece ‘Cobblestone Shield’. I never felt that name fit as well as others, and it always felt too short, so I’m glad I was able to finish it. Happy Holidays!

Reviews

[M. J. Smith]

Now there's something faintly macabre in this... It almost carries an aura of death. Oh, I know it's just my perception. But... It feels like surrender to a live that is somehow... Tainted.
Well, anyway, such are the thoughts of a half educated hillbilly. Stay safe and warm.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much- yes, there is a bit of a darker side to this poem, glad you noticed. (: thanks so much for the review!

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Sandwiches at sunset
Don't got to sleep, we're not done yet
We scared the fish away
As the incense blows away

Amazing lines here, this is awesome

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate it endlessly (:

[Chris]

"Happy Holidays!"

Life HAS a way of empowering us to interact, and when we do we discover - much we wouldn't have taken the time to think about let alone share. You had the opportunity to touch another in a way that touched upon yourself... and created a lifelong memory.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I love this poem. Poetry in motion. I could feel things throughout this read. Scenes jumping like in a dream that I didn't want to end. I like your new user name and picture. I loved your review of my poem and so I came to your page and read your bio and was like, "I remember you, Colacat." I recalled how much I enjoyed reading your poems. This title really caught my eye and when I saw the length I smiled and set my eyes on your first line and was hooked fast, all the way to the end. I don't recall your older version of this poem, but I'm glad you worked on it again, so that I could read it. tyfs

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for such a kind review. It makes me so happy you enjoy my poems so much, thank you a billion times again!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was pretty freaking awesome! I like the way it flowed and listening to the story unfold. Who says you can't rhyme anything with "orange"? (smile) The locking pinkies thing caught me off guard too as my daughter and I do this every night at her bedtime to make our "forever promise". It's just saying we'll love each other forever, no matter what. Ah, and I see you're a fan of the GooGoo Dolls, me too. I'm off to read another. This was great!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I’m so glad you enjoyed this one and it reminded you of such a adorable and wholesome tradition. Thank you for the review again! And Goo Goo Dolls really is an amazing band, it’s so good to see another fan!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

from reading you, I get the feeling we might write in a similar manner...

the works just pour out of us...like pouring tea into a cup...always a different flavor, different metaphor
and when done...we pour another...that cup is gone.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! the dichotomy of hearts and minds and souls .. creates a lot of creative tension for me .. she is whisked away on one hand and dragged down on the other ... i really like the personifications you use .. like:
" Hundreds of paper trees
Protecting me" ...such an innocence behind the barn . with sweet apples ... the colors ... how you use them are emotive for me .. especially the "...lost in that deep teal" right off the bat ... i like your character ... i like how she rides her experiences .. we write so much about memories don't we?! enjoyed reading Colacat!
E.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much for such a wonderful, kind review! It really put a smile on my face and was so nice and generous. Thank you again!

[Einstein Noodle]

i like your poem! ;)

[Betty Hermelee]

Nothing like feeling as if a princess… that you were the missing phase, I could go on with you, even slip to the bottom with you…now that is true love… even though jtcseems crazy, that’s what love and devotion will do to you,
Best,B.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate the review endlessly.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!

[lightsong]

first, I believe You have the quality of being a songwriter, not only your words flow with music, but your rhythm feels as a song too. I like it when I read something written with some ordinary things but hits the readers in a personal way, and that what I felt here reading your poem, You used few of your daily experiences but wrote it in your own personal touch. your emotions were changing, from sweetness, loveliness, gentleness, to sadness, yearnings and wistfulness... of course the ending is wonderfully powerful. Thank You for sharing my friend~

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I'd love to be a song writer, honestly, and it might be something I'll research doing because so many of my poems come in the form of songs, with tunes in mind. Thank you so, so much for such a wonderfully detailed review. (: