Stars Change With The Season

'Don't care if you're here or if we never speak again, just need to know you're happy in the end.'- Gabbie Hanna

It's silver sanity stuck in my bones

Leaving the city then leaving the best of me

I suppose this is finally our final goodbye

Though I searched the spinning galaxies with stars made of ice

And never found a reason why

A reason to really say goodbye

A bathroom mirror shatters

And breaks peace over the morning

Doves just in view mourning

Spirts and their numbers

Take a toll on sequined hearts

You're humming along to the beat of my scars

And you're lost among the stars

Dig your heels in the fields and start all over again

You're not a horrible person

I'm so much worse than

You on your worst days

Starlights, skylines

Will you always stay mine?

I'll finally jump into the chlorine pool

I know I was just a fool

Getting amped up for everyone but me

For dreams of flat fields and charming quirks

I should've known

I really should've know

Cause it never works

The memories of buildings lost in the city grow taller

And the world grows smaller

I don't wanna take the train ride home

And leave you all alone

I guess I have a new worst fear

But in this new land, stars don't spark out here

Reviews

[Seriana]

Hum...this really needs to settle and sink into the bones. Dare I say one of your best? I can truly see your growth as a writer. This is a fine piece.

"Though I searched the spinning galaxies with stars made of ice
And never found a reason why
A reason to really say goodbye"

We never find that reason. Searching and searching...So many stars to search among and yet a reason never come.

"Getting amped up for everyone but me"...this hit a note and changed the tone . Does she not realize the importance of her? She is precious, a gem in the starts glowing above.

Nice work, Colacat. I really enjoyed this piece!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I loved your detailed review and really do appreciate all that you had to say. Thank you for taking the time!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Oh, this is so wonderfully explained and expressed. "Stars made of ice," "the beat of my scars," wow powerful imagery. You have a lovely written voice, like a radio poetry reading type tone that is so easily felt. Tyfs

[Chris Shaw]

Some very poetic lines providing some lovely imagery in this piece. Final goodbyes are never easy.

I don't wanna take the train ride home
And leave you all alone

I wonder if this is really goodbye.?Nicely expressed Colacat.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I really do appreciate it.

[Chris Shaw]

Good to see a post from you :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

"You're humming along to the beat of my scars" is such a heart-rending line that is so relatable to anyone who has ever had heartbreak. This is a very melancholic yet nicely written piece of poetry Colacat. Wonderful work.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so, so much! I appreciate your review and that you enjoyed the poem. Thank you again!

[angel frankie]

I really love your poem 🥺it’s beautiful and delicate and open and honest 💗i can’t wait to read more

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate your kindness and review. It really means so much to me. (:

[barleygirl]

Light & spontaneous feeling to your observations, not so much sad or happy, but just accepting & processing the highs & lows of it all. Love this (((HUGS)))

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I really do appreciate it.

[Melinda McQueen]

I like the imagery and the flow. It all seems to just fit...like some things are meant to be.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind review and the time you took you to read. Thank you again and have a wonderful day!