Revelations With A View

'I overthink your punctuation use, not my fault, just a thing that my mind do,' -Lorde

The floor is made of a delicate powder

There's a ferris wheel past the mountains

And inbetween canyons

You don't need to always be on my mind for me to love you

I don't need to only think about you, to love you

Somehow you got that through my thick head

My soul is haunting my own house

The first to check up on me

Not ashamed of my name

You'll help me get to the top

And one day we'll care a flame of fame

You know I'll miss our young days

Flowers once dead blooming through hay

I'm sorry I left that day

It hurts just to think of May

Maybe we're just an amusement park

Not Disneyland or anything

Just Nara Dreamland

No one comes and visits us often

Everyone else wants to get rid of us

But the people smart enough

Yeah, they get us

Red, blue, green rollercoaster

But frankly

I don't want another Disneyland

Overpriced, dangerous, jealous

I don't care too much about wearing makeup anymore

Since me, myself and I

Then you

Show my insecurities the door

Everything is purple 

Sugary and spinning

I have to face the facts

I can't play no more

I can't push you away anymore

I didn't get more creative

I just found a way to tear it out

From the darkest recceses of my heart 

This is only the start

Author's Note

Meh, not my favorite piece but I needed to post something, and for some reason, I always avoid posting my favorite, most insane pieces. But I'll try to at least post another poem this week! Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Your random thoughts remind me of half sleep and the variety of stuff that flutters by not to return. I pondered alot on Disney and reaffirmed my disliking for amusement parks though my love of Disney movies remains strong. Your thoughts here are fresh and unique Colacat. I always enjoy reading you.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I have a fascination with amusement parks and roller coasters- I love the memories and the fun, but they also freak me out! I adore Disney as well, you can rarely go wrong with it! Thank you so much for the review and I adore your new profile pic! Perfect for autumn and gorgeous!

[Chris Shaw]

Aw, how sweet. Thanks for the lovely compliment :)

[duff]

There are some haunting lines throughout. Pushing out the venom and what hurts us. The emotion is tingling. Great work

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind review. (:

[barleygirl]

I enjoy your careless ongoing metaphor about amusement parks. It was as if you weren't really committed to it, but it kept finding it's way in. Similar to how it can be when memories of some other time creep in, unbidden (((HUGS)))

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I love your interpretation on this. Reviews always help me see even more of my poem. Thank you!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love the metaphor of the amusement park very deep poem loved it

When I was young we used to go to one we have here and as a teen.

I went bk years later took a ferry there with my then adult daughter
Was nice to revisit

Thanks for the great write

‘Flowers once dead blooming through hay
I’m sorry I left that day
It hurts just to think of May’

They were my fave three lines but was hard to choose so many there x

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you so much! I actually think that line might be one of the better ones too! I'm so happy you liked it. The reviews and kindness really do inspire me! Thank you!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Thanks my pleasure

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I love reading your poem because your words always send me on a adventure, sometimes it seems to be on foot, others by train or even on the wings but this time a roller coaster with a new site on every curve. I could listen to your written voice on and on. I like really like the way you explained yourself here. Tyfs

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I think it's a creative piece and I like odd poetry because it's ambiguous which could mean different things to everyone who reads it. I also hope you put out your most insane pieces for us to read. You have a unique voice in poetry and I for one find it refreshing. I'm sure I'm not alone in thinking that as well. So more please and also thank you for sharing your poetry.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Thank you! It truly means so much to me that you found my work refreshing and unique. It was partly due to you and other writers on the site that I began to take my poetry more seriously. I'll be putting out more soon, so thank you!

[LostSage]

your writing is so freaky weird.....but don't ever stop..... stars and flowers atcha✨💐