Collapse

I shut my mouth

So I can scream

And fill my mind

So I don’t dream

 

Smile wide

To hide my pain

And close my eyes

To see my gain

 

Cut myself

But leave no mark

And with bleeding pen

Stitch back my heart

 

Burning brightly

So I can fade

And give away

The things I’ve made

 

Make progress toward

My relapse

Standing ground

I start to relax

Lose my mind

And start to collapse

Reviews

[Emerald Seas]

I like the structure and flow of the poem. Content is disturbing. I've never understood cutting and therefore refrain from commenting where I can't fathom the reasoning, etc.

[CoffeeInfused]

The cut was more metaphorical, honestly. More along the lines of being wounded in the way of heartache and such, honestly. Emotional pain, sometimes like physical, can be one of those things we poke at to see just how much it hurts, regardless of whether we should or not

[CoffeeInfused]

And I just realized I practically used "honestly" twice in almost the same sentence heh. Bad grammar is bad :p

[Emerald Seas]

I think I read it too quickly and went in the wrong direction. It's actually quite clever now that I've pulled my head out of my arse. I still fell a slight 'suicide' feel to it as well, but the 3d stanza refers (to me) of bleeding, pouring it out on the page.... And of course, I definitely understand that! Thanks for commenting to clarify so I'd read it again ;)