Puppet(Master)

Some late-night scribbling, started with the first four lines and grew from there

Puppet, marionette
High on a wire
Actions controlled
By a cerebral spider
Leader, master
Incomparable liar
Dance to his tune
Pulled ever higher
Life-leached, blood-drained
Marked an outsider
Burned to the bone
Torched by the fire
Still dancing away
On the funeral pyre
Led on, on, on
By an obscured supplier
Whispering love and fame
Temptation and change
Stealing your soul
While entrapped in the mire

Reviews

[fwvalidus]

Definitely very good night scribbling. Your word choices are succinct and the flow you have created is smooth so I can transition from line to line with ease so that all content may be absorbed without obstacle. I challenge you to add a bigger punch at the end if possible, the whole poem is good but I would love to say GRAND at the finale.

[CoffeeInfused]

I'll see what I can do! :P

[Emerald Seas]

My first thought was... Goodness, do I know you? Lol... I've had a few drinks so, well...
We are all controlled by our thoughts and desires, weaknesses are the worst (IMHO).
I like the word play at work here. It is striking and thoughtfully written. Well done!