Rolling Stone

Old Drabble, possibly the opening or conclusion to something bigger. I don't know what to do with it yet.

The bluebird fell off a fencepost and landed on my feet, dead. Shot through the neck by a .22 rifle. I glanced around; a boy was clutching the gun, dancing.

 

His parents are negligent, he's doomed to drown in a sea of his own stupidity, and I'm in his crossfire. Disadvantage comes in layers.

 

I want to change the world.

 

I've watched as the tower rose--

 

As the curtain fell,

 

As the seas caught fire,

 

As the people became radioactive dust.

 

Presently, I watch the stone I kicked in frustration come to a rest in the center of the road.

Reviews

[Hedra Helix]

second half of this, from "the tower rose" is f*****g awesome.;) ;) ;)
I get that the first part sets it up, but I think a bit more personal insanity or precission intensity would help give that second half the rumbling drum roll it deserves.

You're aware im a big fan of editing and editing and editing;)

its all written well though, but that second part. wow.

[Jillian]

Love the lines "But I suppose that's the mark of all mad men. Rather than change himself to suit the world, the man chooses to change the world to suit himself." Very insightful; I never thought of man's struggle for something more in this way before.
Nicely done : )

[Nephil]

Everyone wants to change the world. My girlfriend (I'm a dude, that's her in the pic) wants to make everyone happy so they wouldn't hurt each other anymore.

I want to build the grinder. Many people are just... too far-gone if you ask me.

Muhhahahahahaa.... -Ian