Scented

Scented...

So far along

But not so far as not to see her

Loving in ease
How it seems to be

Notion pressed

Her scent, kissing my best friend

In heavens sake
Aside her I finally breath

Tell me girl;

Will you be my baby?

All in reason
It is just the way I am feeling

So many planes

The simple smiles we favour

Cradled souls
Cured in passive fury

On the move

Growing this dream in hand

Now and then
Blend this once forever

Siding to glimpse

Spy our own reflections

Catching shadows
Bound as naught in a supernova

So alive

Riding across dreams horizon

Desired things
I hope you find in me

Show your art

Chart your mountain story

I will be your rock
We will find the way

To fall away

Fading fortune of crazy

Mirrors of you
They are always grace

Soaring whole

Calling me with the rarest song

It is all I want,
to show her me

In my heart

Grafted to the way you are dancing

From the start,
I heard your heart sing

Always stay

Sway on this swing so seasoned

Here in our hands
It is all to have

Together alone

A sandy shore where open sea is

Unreserved
You paint serene

The more we know,

the more we let the doubts go

The more we touch,
the more our love grows

Author's Note

New style. Likes, dislikes? Advice?

Anything much appreciated.
Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Faelinn Asphodellus and..]

Not sure if you are still around. Its been a while. I love the meaning and the feeling behind this. The style was a bit hard to grasp at first. The two lines per verse makes it a bit difficult for me personally. It makes it seem longer than it is, but worth every moment. Wonderful piece. Hope to see more from you soon :)

[Bubo]

Loving someone to that extent that you can write with such heartfelt thought is beautiful, I love the style and way you convey the emotion, without it being gushy.

[Khitii Lae-Ahn]

What a fragrant bouquet...you turn the emotion into a gentle breeze that wafts throught the air and delves deep into the reader...very well enjoyed reading this beautiful piece

[deeps]

I like this and the wonderful emotion you penned.
Very well written.

[David W Moore III]

I like it. It's different. The imagery is beautiful. Your words paint them like a fine brush dipped in emotion.

[Erin]

"Aside her I finally breath." Shouldn't it be "breathe" instead of "breath"? Just a thought on grammar, other than that I didn't find anything else grammatically wrong with it...
You got me to the point where I had to start over and read it out loud. So far, your poetry is the kind that has to be read out loud. This is really good. I wish I could write poetry the same way you do.
I really like this style; it gives the entire poem this whole new edge to it. I also like the font; this also helps with the metaphorical look to it. I really like this one. I like the style and the font, when reading it out loud I didn't get a huge taste of the tone, but your vocabulary is amazing. It helps so much.
I just want to say that through reading this, there's no reason to thank me. It's just that good. You've got some talent, friend, use it well. I'm gonna spend like another hour reading your poetry.
PBP