"The Monster in The Closet"

“The Monster In The Closet”

By Cody Williams

 

1.

“Mommy! Mommy!” Dorthea shouted as she pulled the blankets on her bed up over her head and hid beneath the sheets. Patricia, Dorthea’s mother barged into the room and rushed over to the bedside of her daughter. Patricia sat down on the bed and pulled the covers off of her head and ran her left hand through her blonde hair.

            “What is it sweetie?” Patricia asked as she reached over to the bedside lamp and turned it on. She knelt down beside her daughter and placed her hand over her head and stroked it.

            “Over there! Over there! There’s a monster in the closet!” Dorthea shouted as she clutched her teddy bear and pointed to the closet door that was directly across from the foot of her bed. Patricia looked and realized that the closet door was cracked with about two inches left until it was shut completely. Patricia looked back over at her daughter and stood up.

            “Sweetie, I told you that there was no such thing as monsters.” She told her as she placed her hands in the front pockets of her baby blue robe. Dorthea looked up at her mother, shook her head, and then pointed at the closet door again.

            “No Mommy! There’s a monster in there! I seen it!” She shouted again. Patricia let out a sigh and turned to walk over towards the door. When she got to the door, she slowly reached out for the door when I swung open on its own. Patricia let out a gasp in fear as she stumbled back and fell on to the floor. Smokey, Dorthea’s pet black cat prowled out of the closet and leaped onto Dorthea’s bed. Patricia placed her hand over her heart and sighed with relief before she picked herself off of the floor. She reached out and shut the closet door and then turned back around to face her daughter.

            “See honey, there was nothing scary in there. Just Smokey!” Patricia said as she slowly walked over to her daughter’s bedside. She sat down on the bed next to her and gently stroked her head again. “It’s time to go to bed now okay?” She said. Dorthea nodded in agreement and wiped her eyes with her fists. Patricia leaned over and gently kissed her forehead. She stood from the bed and walked over to her bedroom doorway and reached up to turn off the bedroom light.

            “Mommy!” Dorthea shouted out. Patricia stopped and turned around to face her daughter. “Can you leave the hallway light on please?” She asked. Patricia smiled.

            “Yes sweetie!” She said as she turned off the bedroom light and walked out of the room into the lit hallway. Dorthea rolled over on her side, closed her eyes, and drifted off to sleep.

 

2.

Dorthea’s eyes flew open when a crash sound came from the closet. She clutched her teddy bear again and quickly sat up in bed. The light in the hallway had been turned off and her room was covered in darkness.

            “Mommy!” Dorthea shouted. There was no answer. She looked at the closet door that had once been shut by her mother but was now open. Dorthea sat there for a moment and then turned and placed her feet on the hard wood floor of her bedroom. She stood from the bed and slowly made her way across the room towards the closet door. With each step she took, the room seemed to grow longer. What once was five feet had quickly begun to feel like twenty. As she reached the door of the closet, she slowly reached up to grab the doorknob and slowly turned it. The door hinge let out an eerie creek as the door began to open.

            Dorthea leaped back with fear as she gazed into the dark closet. There was nothing there. Several of her shirts and jackets were hanging on a bar and her brown wooden toy chest was sitting in the back next to the wall. Dorthea walked closer and peeked her head into the closet door. She looked around. Still, there was nothing there. She smiled with relief and slowly stepped away from the closet and shut the door behind her. Dorthea leaned her back against the door and let out a sigh. She stood there for a moment longer and then made her way back over to her bed. Dorthea sat down on the bed and looked down at her bare feet on the floor.

            She began to notice a black figure that was lying beside her purple painted nightstand. Dorthea picked up her right foot and slowly brushed it against the black figure. She smiled as the feeling of it tickled her feet. It was soft like a black patch of fur. She slowly began to bend down to grab it.

            “Smokey?” Dorthea said as she reached down and picked up what she believed to be the cat. The figure didn’t move. She wrapped her hands around it but something was different. It was cold. She picked it off of the floor and sat it on her lap. It was the cat, but it was dead. Dorthea’s eyes began to water as she let out a loud cry. The cat’s drooped down as if someone or something wrapped their hands around it and snapped it into. Tears poured down Dorthea’s face and she let out another moan of despair. As she sat there and cried she felt something began to wrap around her right ankle. She looked at a hand with inch long nails wrap it’s fingers around her foot and she jerked her foot away and brought it up onto the bed next to her. Smokey’s lifeless body tumbled to the floor as the creature slowly began to make its way out from under the bed.

            The creature stood to its feet and slowly tilted its head to the right to pop its neck. The creature wasn’t over four feet tall. It turned around to face her. Red colored horns were sprouting from its head and the creature’s teeth were razor sharp and jagged. The creature let out a growl as it slowly began to make it’s way to Dorthea. Dorthea let out a final scream as the monster reached out to grab her.

Copyright 2014 by Cody Williams
Courtesy of TRUE TERROR PUBLICATIONS
A division of TTP Entertainment

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Reviews

[Dayran]

A theme on children and pets ... and the limitless possibilities ... that it leads to ... sometimes to inexplicable ends. There's obviously an angel missing here. It makes me wonder whether the reality we seek in these times ... minus angels and heaven ... helps. Nice ...

[Cody Williams]

Thanks for reading Dayran!

-CW

[NoelHC]

Someday people in horror stories and movies will just learn to NEVER OPEN THE DOOR. this one followed your usual formula, I noticed a few little errors, for example "she slowly reached out for the door when I swung open on its own" I should be it, that type of thing.

I also note that you often add words that are not required, which detract from the impact, for example in
"Patricia, Dorthea’s mother barged into the room and rushed over to the bedside of her daughter." would flow better as "Patricia, Dorthea’s mother, barged into the room and rushed over to her daughter's bedside."

Little touches like that will make an interesting story more readable.

[Cody Williams]

Thanks for reading Noel!

-CW

[Jon Roggie]

Nicely done! Reminds me of some of the stories about the Boogey Man.

[Cody Williams]

Thanks for reading Jon!

-CW

[NoahDrake]

Really wish I wouldn't have read that right before bed. Good story, good scare

[NoahDrake]

Really wish I wouldn't have read that right before bed. Good story, good scare

[Cody Williams]

Thanks for reading Noah!

-CW

[Sami Khalil]

Man. How do you come up with these scary stories. A cat of terror...Excellent...:)................

[Cody Williams]

Thanks for reading Sami! This actually took a little while longer to write than most of my stories (despite the length). I just couldn't get a good direction going on it...until tonight. :)

-CW

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. A good one. You are welcome...:).................