"The Lost Empire II: The Man In Black"

"The Lost Empire II: The Man In Black"

A Story by Cody Williams
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This is the second installment of The Lost Empire Series.

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“The Man In Black: A Lost Empire Story”

By Cody Williams

 

            The Man in Black woke up as the sun peaked through the cracks shining in his eyes. He sat up quickly laying on a bell of hey with a bottle of Jack Daniels in his hand. He took a sip of the whiskey and threw the bottle across the barn. He picked himself up and bent back over picking up his long black leather trench coat. The Man In Black dusted it off and slid it on. He was wearing a plain black button up shirt and black jeans along with a black pair of snake skin boots, a black cowboy hat and of course, his signature black leather trench coat.

            The Man in Black pulled off his cowboy hat and pulled his long black hair back that reached about an inch past his shoulder. He placed the cowboy hat back on and walked over to the red wooden door on the barn and leaned up against it. He opened the door to a crack and peaked out of it. With no sign of the knights, he opened the barn door up and darted out of it.

            The king’s men were after The Man In Black because of the destruction he caused of the previous town, Covehill. This was nothing new to The Man In Black. In fact, he had become quite known for it. It has happened on more times than he can count, for centuries. He goes into a town and works the services of a wizard and destroys the city one person at a time. However, he’s not as much as a wizard as he is a demonic figure. Many people believe that he could be the devil himself.

            He turned the corner of the barn and ran into the filed where the horse’s roam. The Man In Black slowly walked up to Barnstormer, the fastest horse on the farm who was drinking water. He grabbed the horse by the main and jumped up on the back of it. The horse squalled and stood up on its hind legs knocking off The Man In Black. He stood up and dusted himself off. He grabbed the horse and looked it in the eye. His eyes began to glow red, which startled the horse.

            The horse began to spasm in attempt to jerk himself away from The Man In Black before finally calming down. The horse’s eyes began glowing red too and The Man In Black smiled.

            “I think we understand each other now partner!” The Man In Black whispered in the ears of the horse. He jumped back upon the back of the horse and drove his spurs into the side of the horse. He horse squalled and began running off across the land.

            The Man In Black loved causing chaos. He loved causing misery. His favorite activity to do in town was to punt a newborn child much like you would punt a football. He loved destroying cities and families.

            The only problem is, he had been just about everywhere on his side of Eastman, the world in which he lived in. He needed something more. He needs something different…and he knew it.

            Every night he remembers having dreams. Dreams of A Lost Empire. The most powerful Empire in the known universe. A place where he can transform himself from wizard to a God. The Man In Black has nearly everything needed to get to the lost empire. He had the magic needed. He had everything except for one needed ingredient. He needs the crystal.

            He knows that he needs it. In fact, he has become mad looking for the crystal. He dreams of the crystal and the neon purple glow it releases into the night sky. His thirst for it continues to grow everyday.

            The Man In Black continued running for the “holy grail” or “unholy grail” as a manner of speaking before he saw the tornado. The horse stood up on its hind legs once again knocking off The Man In Black. The Man In Black’s eyes began to glow red with anger and he picked himself up and walked over grabbing the horse again. He looked over at the twister as it began to dissipate and falling from the sky was no other than James Thomas. James picked himself up and dusted himself off. The race to the Lost Empire has began.

 

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Author's Note

Cody Williams
I realize that this is a really short story. The main reason I wrote this story was to introduce the main antagonist of The Lost Empire series. Many of my horror genre fans did not like the first installment "The Twister." I do encourage everyone to read it. It will get better. Believe me. Perhaps this story could be a stand alone without you having to read "The Twister," however, I think it would be your best interest to read "The Twister" first to help better your understanding. Please comment on it below and stay tuned for future installments.

-CW

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Nice one Cody! I see this story coming all the way from the days of the Yahweh and the situation it developed with the Ammon group of the Egyptians. Yahweh represented the innocent nothing of virtue ... no fanfare, no self adulation. The Ammon group instituted a faith ... called it a name and then raised the specter of religion and holiness. A common objective but two sides of the same coin.

The lost empire is certainly the common ground from whence we came ... but do we just turn back or go forward until we learn to co-exist on the same ground. Interesting.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW



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This is an improvement, but still you narrate rather describe the action. Also have you read Stephen King's Dark Tower series? This story seems dangerously close to the first novel in that series.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for taking the time to read it Mark! I am a huge Stephen King fan but have never read The Dar.. read more
Mark

11 Years Ago

The series starts with what I think is the greatest opening line ever written "The man in black fled.. read more
Nice one Cody! I see this story coming all the way from the days of the Yahweh and the situation it developed with the Ammon group of the Egyptians. Yahweh represented the innocent nothing of virtue ... no fanfare, no self adulation. The Ammon group instituted a faith ... called it a name and then raised the specter of religion and holiness. A common objective but two sides of the same coin.

The lost empire is certainly the common ground from whence we came ... but do we just turn back or go forward until we learn to co-exist on the same ground. Interesting.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW
Another really great story, awesome job Cody!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW
This was not a bad introduction of the Man in Black, but a couple of things:

First, your tenses changed from past to present and back several times without warning. A quick run through it will straighten that out - it's a minor issue at worst.

Second, if you are using this to introduce him as the antagonist, you have a good opportunity to make him much more than a cardboard character. Give him a name, a past, and a reason why. Calling him the Man in Black is ok if it's other characters referring to him - but he doesn't exist in a vacuum. Having a name, even if only the reader knows it, gives the reader more of a connection to him.

If the reader can understand the character, it makes the character much more powerful and believable. Think of the villains you've read or watched in movies - the best ones were the ones you understood. Not that you'd agree with them, or do what they do, but you can understand -why-. That's what makes them stand out.

Hopefully, this helps.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for reading it! He does have a name, it is just unknown until the installment "James Meets Th.. read more
Douglas White

11 Years Ago

Ah, I see where you're going with this. The I'd recommend dropping the capitol letters and use varia.. read more
Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

I see what you are saying! I like it and will add the idea in future installments! Thanks again!
it was really good but a bit fast paced. keep up the good work :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for taking the time to read it!

-CW
I saw this on live feed and I had to check. I got a good treat of wizardy and needed magic. Pen on...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review Sami!

-CW
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
really interesting chapter..;)))))))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW

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