"The Fog On The Windshield"

"The Fog On The Windshield"

A Story by Cody Williams
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"The Fog on the Windshield" is a short story written by Cody Williams.

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The Fog On The Windshield”

By Cody Williams

            Tammy Emmett opened her eyes and looked over at the alarm clock that read 5:45. She sat up in bed with panic and grabbed the clock.

            “S**t! I got to go! I am going to be late.” She said to her husband Red, who was lying in the bed next to her. She had to be at work by 6:00. Tammy was a middle-aged woman with an average body type. She had short curly black hair and was leathery tan. She stood up from the bed and walked over the dresser on the other side of the bedroom. She pulled open the top drawer of the dresser and pulled out her typical silky white granny panties and put them on. She then took off her red nightshirt and threw it onto the floor.

            Then she opened up the bottom drawer of the dresser and reached into it pulling out a white turtleneck. She put it on and walked over to the bedside next to her husband. She kissed him on the cheek and hugged waking him up.

            “Drive safely and have a good day honey!” Red said as he hugged her then rolled back over to drift off to sleep. Red has about six feet and five inches tall and was quite muscular. He had a shaved and bigger than average sized ears. She stood up from the bed and walked over to the bedroom door and walked out it. She walked down the dark hallway to the staircase leading to the kitchen.

She walked down the stairs, into the kitchen, and over the cabinet drawers next to the refrigerator. She opened it and gabbed a Quaker Oat Meal To Go and walked over to the door leading to the garage. She walked in the garage and over to her blue colored Chevrolet Blazer SUV and put the key in the keyhole and unlocked the door. She opened the door and got into the SUV.

She reached over to buckle the seat belt and she started the SUV. She opened the garage door and backed out of the garage. She backed out of the driveway and put the SUV into drive. She began to drive down the road when she noticed that a strange fog covered the entire windshield. It was as if someone else was in the car before she got in. She reached over to the dash and turned on the defroster and waited for the fog to fade off of the windshield.

“What the hell? How could the windshield be fogged up? I am the only one in the car! Aren’t I?” She asked herself. She could hear something rattling and moving in the car. It sounded like two rats fighting for food. She pulled the SUV off of the road onto the emergency lane and put it in park.

She paused for a moment before slowly turning her head to the back seat of the SUV. She looked in the seat and in the floorboard only to find nothing. Her heart began to beat faster and faster.

“If there is someone in the car, they must be in the back.” She thought to herself. She opened the door and walked to the rear of the SUV. She placed her hand on the handle of the trunk door and waited for a moment. She took in a deep breath. She felt as if her heart was going to explode out of her chest. Her hands began to sweat nervously. She opened the rear door and leaped back knowing that there was going to be someone backs there. Nothing.

She whipped sweat off of her fore head in relief. She took in another deep breath and slammed shut the rear door. She began walking back to the front of the SUV and opened the front door. She got in the front seat and closed to door. She noticed once more that fog covered the windshield. She couldn’t understand why if there was nobody else in the car.

She looked into the rear view mirror revealing a navy blue blanket laying in the back seat. There was something strange with it. She noticed that peaking out of the bottom of the blanket were two cat eyes staring back at her. She felt her heart beat hard once again as she turned and reached to the back seat and grabbed the blanket. He screams of terror could be heard throughout the darkness that is night.

 

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Author's Note

Cody Williams
This is another one that I found that I wrote a while back. This one is for those of you who said you like my horror stories better. And yes, I realize that it is short. I wrote this one around the same time as "The Text Message." Please leave me comments and reviews!

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This one is pretty rough with spelling and grammar but again, you've done well to take the mundane(waking up for work) work in creating a setting for a strange and unusual tale. Another piece that with a bit of clean up could wind up being a great short story if you wanted.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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It would be a curious suggestion to say that in our breathing lives the life of another or more but there are days when we find that suggestion less absurd. For Tammy this certainly was one of those days ... up ahead ... the days of twilight.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read it!

-CW
Like the way you introduce the characters, done well..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW
Good concept for a story, but you have too many sentences beginning with "she" And you need to spend more time concentrating on the horror aspect of your story than on the descriptions of this woman and her husband.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for taking the time to read it!

-CW
good storyline :) enjoyed the short, packed story

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW
This was a good concept for a short story, reminiscent of Stephen King's "Here There Be Tygers".

Again, what I had said in my review of "The Ghost of Jeff Walker" applies here as well. Your writing tends towards -telling- the story instead of -showing- the reader the story. It may seem a small thing, but it is very significant.

Other than that, I would like to see rewrites on these stories, because they have a LOT of potential just waiting to be released.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

So much for the review! This was written a while ago and I do realize that it was a bit rushed.
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This is a great story. You gave me goosebumps. I like the character descriptions in the first part of the story - it drew me in to the story - it was a bit short, but the ending made up for it. Great work! :) Julie

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review!

-CW
Great read CW loved it :)
Cheers!
Singh :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the review!

-CW
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Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the review!

-CW
Very good Cody. You have developed character personality early on and that is what makes a reader want to read on. The story line developed in a nice progressive form. Way to go my young friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the review!

-CW
Okay so this is okay, but like, you mention the protagonist's name literally twice in the entire passage. As a result of this, 90% of your sentences start with "she," and it's kind of annoying. I feel like there is no description, like it's all facts. Very factual with little room to expand. I'm being picky, but it'll help you in the long run, I guess. Try to make a list of every first word of all your sentences and then try to think of other words or different ways to start your sentences other than the word "she."

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cody Williams

11 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by and reviewing! This is a rough draft and is a bit of a rushed story. I will f.. read more

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I am in my second year at Carson-Newman University in Jefferson City, Tennessee were I major in instrumental music education and minor in English. My passions include playing the trombone/euphonium an.. more..

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