blades

Tending to my wounds, with grace

I put my own hand on my heart, instead of yours

You remember,

the picture we took

of your hand

on my heart

Your hand had been harvesting blades all along.

Author's Note

I welcome any reviews or feedback :)

Reviews

[Chris]

I like the form you've chosen.

Hell of a message too...

[Coccinellidae]

Thank you! :)

[emmajoy]

For me this poem flows very well, says what it means, emotes, instructs. If i had to do anything, would omit 'the grace' but if you feel it's apt, use it.. tis your mind, your creation.

[Coccinellidae]

Thank you so much for the feedback. I appreciate it!

[Relic]

The sentence structure could be better. I think the repeating could be eliminated too. By eliminating lines 7 and 8, I think it might be slightly better.

[Coccinellidae]

Dude, such good feedback. I felt it wasn't quite right and I couldnt figure out what it was. Thank you!

[Relic]

You're welcome. :)

[keith]

only once have i known this hollow feeling you express so eloquently
so powerfully revealing