A Night In Hell

I decided to try to embrace a darker side of me...I've gotten many compliments, so I'm starting to get confident that I did a good job.

Shadows are closing in around you

and you cannot see your way through
Look around for the light,
but there is none in the dark of night.
The raven's croak echos across the land
and nothing is going as you had planned.
Run through the crooked paths
to try to escape the darkness's wrath
You hear something overhead
you're down on the ground now, filled with dread
Close your eyes, go back to the past, not long ago
before everything had gone below
Embrace death now, as your friend
and pray for a quick, painless end
As your body slowly drains of blood
and you feel the painful, internal flood
You're all alone, you cry out
but you keep going on without
The worlds gone, as is any life
it was destroyed in the endless strife

Author's Note

Constructive of course.

Reviews

[Raindrop]

"The raven's croak echos across the land
and nothing is going as you had planned."

My favorite part. :))
I love to read things where a writer embraces the dark side..
Different for everyone, but still the same darkness in the end :)))
Amazingly written ^^

[Daydreamer54]

wow, beautiful and errie! hreat write!

[Lost in Wonderland]

wow. just wow. this poem was really amazing. Honestly, I think you should embrace your dark side more oftem because it has some cookies to give out. I cant explain why, but the dark, poetic beauty of thos jut blew my mind. Just a really graet write!

[Sean Eddingfield]

Nice write... I wanted more when I was done... what was the sound overhead? Describe it to me...

[Searching 4 Serenity]

Well done! This is good for someone who "appears" to have such a 'shining light'
"Embrace death now, as your friend and pray for a quick, pain less end"
"The worlds gone, as is any life it ended in the endless strife"
I LIKE!