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Mind ramblings.......

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Cockroaches and ants

Quench their thirst

On the sweat beads from the night terrors

That dominates me

Cowardly men handle weapons

That can take a life

While beautiful women

Worship ugliness

Robins and Bluebirds call a truce

As young children sing

The Gregorian chant

In auto tune

Spirits whisper in my ears

About past glories

And future failure

I put my earphone on

And ignore

Them

Author's Note

No direction. What ever come to mind. Hopefully it will form something thought provoking.

Reviews

[Dayran]

A new experience brings strange encounters. Like an orchid you have not seen before, it is possible to say ' I don't like it' on account of non familiarity. But take a second look, growth in life comes with new experiences. A poem about the mind's rambling discoveries!

[Esana Bridges]

....This might be rambling, but somehow it seems really deep and really seems to speak to the world around us. "Weapons That can take a life...Beautiful women worship ugliness...auto tune" --> it seems to be a reflection of the events around our life right now. (*Note: I think auto-tune is written like that, not that it matters much.)

I really like the last part about putting your earphones on and ignoring what's going on around you. It's something that I think we do a lot, whether it's good or not.

Ahem. As some poor English student has said somewhere, "English is the only class where you can write a five page paper about a five line poem." Whether you meant it or not, I think it's really deep and thought-provoking.

It's lovely.

[Chelsea]

hmmmm... i do like this, mostly because its the ramblings of a scattered mind. that kind of thing has been my crack lately...... but anyway, i'd like to see some more of these; they are very thought provoking.

[fernii]

Very interesting

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

This is great man, i definitely feel like this is a modern day thought process.. maybe not the words everybody would use, but the uniqueness is that it is your words but you definitely set an outline to free thought here.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the places you took me with the poem. You create many visions with this poem. Each statement could lead into a long conversation. Most of us close the door to the real things. That is sad. We need to look for the good in the mess we live in. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes we have to let go of things we can't control and focus on what is happening right now. Not what will happen and what has already happened. This is a good poem for stating those facts. Life can be a struggle and we have to move forward each day starting new.

[Kloverfield]

Enchanting. Matter of fact. Trying to figure out what it means.

[Audrey Howitt]

Well done! Your random thoughts all weave together so well---

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Cool...this is freaky. (laughing) I'd make "dominate" singular since terrors is plural. All the birds can cease war except the mockingbird...isn't that a shame? One of those stabbed me in the back once just for feeding a worm to its chicks...ungrateful birds! (laughing) or good parents for preventing the human influence on its young...depends on your perspective. Cowardly men carry guns...real men kill with words...but usually the real men are in charge of the cowards with the guns...it's a viscious circle. I'll let you think that one over. Satire perhaps? hmmm I want the ant to do the Gregorian chant...a chanting ant...there are fire ants but no smoking anthills...so I'm wondering if there are anthills with tiny (NO SMOKING) signs. You see now that insanity is contagious.

[Erica Daubert]

this is GREAT. i had a smile through reading, but then when i hit the ending "I put my earphones on and ignore them" f*****g awesome, man. I'm the same way. I just don't have time for it, and so what. We're better off. The line about women worshipping ugliness, here's what I personally took from that. It's almost like women are so uniform from society and cosmopolitans criteria guides that they forget originality. they look like they came straight off a god damn assembly line when in all realites their flaws are what really makes them beautiful. that's the awesome thing about poetry though. people can interpret their own thoughts from lines that might've not been intended in how they were meant... but it still makes you think. bravo. i digged this.