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Mind ramblings.......

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Cockroaches and ants

Quench their thirst

On the sweat beads from the night terrors

That dominates me

Cowardly men handle weapons

That can take a life

While beautiful women

Worship ugliness

Robins and Bluebirds call a truce

As young children sing

The Gregorian chant

In auto tune

Spirits whisper in my ears

About past glories

And future failure

I put my earphone on

And ignore

Them

Author's Note

No direction. What ever come to mind. Hopefully it will form something thought provoking.

Reviews

[Dayran]

A new experience brings strange encounters. Like an orchid you have not seen before, it is possible to say ' I don't like it' on account of non familiarity. But take a second look, growth in life comes with new experiences. A poem about the mind's rambling discoveries!

[KAOlmsted]

This really worked for me. I loved every line. That "Them" at the end really punctuated this piece, I'm a fan of that style of writing and incorporate it in my own work whenever possible ;-) Great stuff here.

[Blessed_Angel]

Humm. Interesting poem.

[patricia]

While beautiful women Worship ugliness, you kinda voiced what I already knew but never thought here.
As young children sing The Gregorian chant In auto tune Spirits whisper in my ears....and then the ending lines I put my earphone on Ang ignore Them...Outstanding! Thanks.

[freelancejouster]

mmn, i like the feel of this and the edges of this. wonderful wordings

[Emily Rae]

interesting bit of ramblings here. your details are vivid and chilling

[Stormy Weather]

That's really interesting. I like how you ended it with just pretty much blocking it all out. Sometimes,that's the best option.

[Jeremy Baker]

Dark and despairing, but I think I will need to sleep on it to get inside it. Good work.

[Scandalous]

Love the ending approach and the creepy beginning! Keep up the great work!

~ Scandalous

[Amila Jay]

A distracted mind or a collection of thoughts in one's mind put into words, excellent write:)