Weapons of Autumn

I laid in bed one night. An image came to my head. I had to put it into words

The Weapons of Autumn

 

I’m thinking about New England sunsets

Glowing over Ivy covered

Red brick buildings

And tunnels formed by trees

Hovering over cobblestone throughways

 

Orange and red leaves form

A natural quilt over

Dry, browning grass

Awaiting expiration

 

This is what takes place

In the Celestial Bio dome called

Seasons

 

This is the Season I referrer to as

Natures wake

The changing from the summer dress

Into winters pre cardigan garb

 

Cool breezes keep me vigilant

The night has grown a few hours

My dialogue turn into a frothy mist

Which flows from my chapped sore lips

As I tell stories of summer time folly

 

The moon and I make eye contact

We both share a secret

He tries to read my mind

I let

Him

Author's Note

Something new......

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

I'm not familiar with New England but your descriptive power is such that I can imagine being there. Great write!

[realmwriter]

I like the ethereal quality this has trough the entire piece. Nice write man

[Livana Lowell]

Dear Judas Hammer,

Aw man, I wrote a poem about Autumn too. It is my favorite season, but my poem isn't as great as this one. You described all the joys of this beautiful season so vividly and great. I think what makes it good is that it's a realistic setting, I suppose.

I enjoyed this read. I especially loved the last stanza. It was so original and I could relate to it well.

Thank you for sharing.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

[JB Murray]

Wow... this is a great piece.
Maybe I'm a little partial, as I live in New England, but the description is fantastic. It's funny, I wrote a song a few years back that share a good deal of this poem's feel, would almost swear you had heard the song...lol.
The last verse especially stands out, sharing a secret with the moon. Nice write!

[Calypso]

Reminds me of home :)

[Daniel88Batson]

Love the last stanza. Interesting piece.
As some construction, I feel that the phrasing of some lines could be altered to help the flow. And punctuation would definitely help the reader understand how you hear it in your head.

[Sunni Davis]

I love Autumn and your words captured the essence of the season perfectly. I could see the image in your mind as clearly as I could see the words in front of me.

[Lindsey]

Quite beautiful and a very well painted picture.

[M.E.Lyle]

I love autumn more than any other season. In New England it might be a bit more potent than I'm used to, living here in the Texas heat, but I loved this. It's simplistic in its approach and yet brings in all the everyday things one might find on a beautiful fall day. I love your line "pre cardigan garb...pure genius.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Lovely writing... I enjoy whole poem... Keep it up... God bless you!