30 day Notice

My time on 12th and Centre in San Pedro. They shot the last scene of friday part two at my former home......I know so what!

30 Day Notice:

It stinks

the air wreaks of surrender

Large mounds of trash

lay still in the Alley

next to my Small green abode

Gang Graffiti faces my North

hopelessness faces my south

Rough black youths use my alley

as a throughway

and bathroom

strutting through with bad intentions

my neighbors stare at me

with owl like orbitals 

staring 

glaring

attempting to pierce 

my soul

and locate my secret

place

I stay in a one level, two roomed

green shack

owned by a former male figure skater

from Palos Verdes

he collects the rent, always during the day

My small home sits on the corner of 12th and Centre

police sirens mix with Mariachi Music

the two create a disco of the damned

This is my reality

but it suddenly becomes clear

my thirty day notice

will start

tomorrow

Reviews

[WatashLegend]

Your imagery was perfect, I did get lost towards the end of bit and leave this feeling a bit confused. Then again that may be normal for me cause I do it to myself all the time lol. You're definitely on to something with this write though.

[Sunni Davis]

This is absolutely gritty and real. You've painted a picture of dark, dirty streets.

[R J Askew]

God, it sounds absolutely hideous. You have to get out of that place today. It is absolutely destructive of all the finer aspects of life. But it as created a muscular verse. The best touches for me are '...disco of the dammned. This is my reality...' I hope you get out before the nasties work out you are nailing their ferral eyes in your words! Survive, escape!
As to poets being created there. Methinks they are far more likely to be killed there.

[ImagineItAll]

Awesome, down to earth, crazy truth poetry...loved it.

[Rene Velez]

Real talk...real life...this is where true poets are created...

[Lily Mae]

A tough truth and reality in life today... you penned these emotions and thoughts well..xx

[Kimmee Jean]

I like it but i actually didn't like the ending. For me it feels lacking. I kinda want you to explain more why it will start tomorrow. Why didn't it start before? Why not next week?

[Jvl narasimharao]

Your ending is as good as your beginning

[Chris]

Snapshots of existence - welcome to the future...

Chris

[stars are far]

nice