Bogdonavitch

Standing on top of Bogdonavitch park in San Pedro wishing I could escape.....

Bogdonavitch

 

 

I stood at the top

Only the Sun was higher

There were a few scattered souls,

Milling about

But my main companion was emptiness

The sea surrounded me

The harbor to the left

The Pacific to the right

The Sunbeams my spotlight

For I feel like a thespian, in a one man tragedy

I stretch my arms out wide,

To touch the wind

Hoping maybe I could fly

Maybe, I could have hugged a cloud and

Said hi to Jesus

I dropped my head again,

Peering at the LA harbor

The cranes didn’t know my existence

The harbor seemed like a wide, vast moat

Maybe-if I get a running start

I could have jumped my way to freedom.

Reviews

[Aidz]

Kewl visuals.. well scribed... :)

[Muse]

You painted a great poem to read in my mind's eye. Great analogies with vivid word play. Well penned.

[Sarah]

Love the ending of this piece, really delivers a dark twist.

[Raven Starhawk]

Another pleasure to read.

[WindSong]

I like the feel and flow to it with good imagery and delivery. Well written!

WindSong

[Calypso]

Another great poem

[Becky C Strukamp]

WOW, this was a powerful write! Supurb imagery.

[Rene Velez]

nice imagery and well thought out lines

[Branch Isole]

I like this, it's different.
(I have one suggestion- place a one line space after the line
"The harbor . . . ")