Broadway Circle of life....

Broadway Circle of life....

A Chapter by Judas Hammer
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The seen stared to get boring...when the Ghetto opened up

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When I woke the light from the adjoining Condo complex found my eyes, as I wondered who lived on the other side. It was expensive, modern and screamed yuppie up and comers owned space. Young lawyers trying slip and fall cases, while accountant write off thousand dollar lunches in New Port Beach or some kind of banker denying an ethnic family a loan they needed to move out of Inglewood to Culver city for a better shot at the American dream and to keep their three son from becoming Bisexual Bloods like Ty and Cory.

     I showered and dressed into some basic club gear: black shirt and jeans. I was checking out the Basement again. The last time I was drunk on Belvedere and cursing out a woman for stealing my women. I was a changed man. I better man. I would behave. I went to Maria’s a grabbed a fish burrito. A Mexican customer tried to pick me up in Spanish. I ignored him and turned to my glorious fish burrito.

       I ate and walked a block down to Tommys: a liquor store with a big smiley face on the front. I had seen it for years, when I used to take Broadway to my Wilson High Subbing assignments, but never knew what kind of store it happened to be. I knew it had to be a happy store.

Maybe they sold smiles and joyful encounters!

     The store had a cool, intimate interior, as the refrigerated isle met me at the doorway. There was just enough room to walk in and could only fit no more than five people at a time. The stock boy was a short, slender Oscar De La Hoya looking man in his late twenties. The Cashier was a thin, regal looking man with a graying goatee and a matching thick mustache. He has long hair and on first appearance could have been mistaken for an artist, musician or a pimp.

     I walked in a grabbed a Four Lokos because I didn’t like to play. Like I stated earlier: I get right to the point. They stared at me like a stranger the first time I made a purchase but over time we would all become fast friend. Throwing one-liners at each other as we made friendly banter back and forth. Occasionally, they asked what I was doing after work or where I was hanging, but nothing more than that.

      I started to get the gist of the Ghetto. If you were straight: you were not a friend of the Ghetto. You were an outside and enemy to be shunned and ignored. To me it was a myth that the homosexual community it out to convert every straight man. I believe a straight man has to have the urges already. If your heterosexuality was discovered you are treated like a Pariah.  Shunned!

     I had made it a point to play by military rules: Don’t ask don’t tell. I would have never been able to scribe about the ghetto as a straight men. I had to adjust myself to the community and flow like water. I went to the Basement, making it before ten. I took my frisking like a man and entered the door and descended the stairs. I drunkenly made fish eyes at the beautiful young Latinas with the tight dresses dancing in girl groups on the floor. After trying to get a few number and failing I returned to the Villa and slept off the drunkness, while absorbing bites from the little, flying, non-rent paying monsters.

     When was not working, I was writing. When I was not working, I was working out. When I was not working out, I was drinking and stumbling around the Ghetto: mad and sad at the same time. I couldn’t be with the small angel that brought me so much joy. I couldn’t blame her mother in retrospect: it’s the mother job to make sure the child was happy and well centered. I played the background dad yet prayed everyday for the chance to see he little smile and pretty, brown curls.

     After a month of the same routine: work, Kettle bell and weekends at the Basement life started to lose it purpose. While fun and new, I wasn’t meeting women and ones I did meet were full of games and past damage. It wasn’t hard to get phones number, it was just hard to get them to answer the phone. I think the madness grew in females, after the age of thirty and only a few men knew that secret. The others didn’t have the armor. The armor needed to take the emotional brow betting they witnessed from their mother, Step mother and older, single sisters.

     My weekend crew was Noland a tall, stout LA country sheriff with the west coast dance moves and the baby face. He would double fist two drinks at the same time and grind on thick Latinas to a smooth west side hip hop tune. He was clean cut but lived the hood life in his younger days. He was a former Insane Crip from the Eastside. The other partner in crime was Tracy a tall, thin, brown man in his early. He had a short haircut and an expression that never changed. I never understood his mannerism. He was odd and seemed a step slower, yet again he was from Central California and they did things a little different up that way. It was better to be seen at a night-spot with a group rather than solo. Going to a club alone screamed Serial Killer.

      After stalking drunk, Mexican girls strolling to their cars we parted ways. Tracy and Noland lived together somewhere downtown. I walked back to Broadway making my way to the Falcon to see if I could get lucky and find a bi sexual woman, who was lonely and maybe left at the club by her lover. I would come along and save her. I only wanted to save someone. Then we fall in love and move into her place, then she finds I had been drinking her wine or she too comes under control of the devil and I start all over again.

      I halted at the Red light preparing to cross the street. A little blond, man of about forty stood next to me. Hands jammed in his pocket, while he stared ahead around anxiously.

“He man how are you doing tonight?”

To me he had a little bit of a Serial Killer, freak look: short non-styled hair with a plain everyday man face. He wore a collared shirt and light colored Dockers. These situations became common place.  I remembered being drunk one night and walking to the 7-11. While inside a short, dark skinner man with big bulging eyes covered by a tight baseball cap and small gut hovering over long, golf shorts. He approached me and asked what my plans were. I said, ‘walking to 7-11 to attack to Big Bites with cheese and a Mike’s Hard Lemonade’ (even though it was too late to sell liquor.) He asked me what I wanted, because he would get me anything. I took him up on his offer and asked him for a Jamaican beef patty and a Mike’s Hard Lemonade.

    The man said he had some Mikes at the house. He got me the patties, but said I had to follow him home for the Drink. I was drunk and needed another one. I ate my food on the way. The strangers told me a little about himself. He worked for the LA transit department. He was from Bakersfield but lived in Long Beach for five years. He informed me he almost was canned from his job because of his addition: the Willington Gay bathhouses: his thirst for the stream and flesh almost led to his firing.

      I was surprised Dub’s never told me about the bathhouse. Wilmington was a little big violent town between Harbor City and Long Beach.  There was nothing nice in that tiny hovel that housed Velrico refineries and Fante tales. I remembered one time behind Harbor College I stumbled upon an area where men hooked up with men in thicket brush. Maybe the bathhouses were close to that area.

     We made it to his apartment. He lived on the ground level of a fourplex on the corner of Orange and Forth. I walked inside and scanned the room. It was spacious and very stylish. He didn’t seem like the artsy type capable of putting together a quality room.

He handed me a metal canister filled with Mike Hard Lemonade. I must had been hooked on the idiot juice. You follow a stranger home, don’t know his name and drink orange stuff from a metal canister. You should be raped and dismembered. You fingers fed to exotic animals!



© 2013 Judas Hammer


Author's Note

Judas Hammer
Let me know whats you think. I ran through it a couple times. Im trying to get my editing better. Comments please....

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Hey Pissassa! ... where did this come from bongo? Fantastic ... a giant leap ... a closet without mothballs ... man, you make a quick turn on that big Testarosa of yours!

A well planned piece of writing that teases, enthuses and then leaves the reader grasping for more ...
' don't let on ' ... that's gonna be the new word on adrenalin rushes. Well done Tonto!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

LOL gracias gracias



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I kind of got scared. I was just screaming in my head, "Just walk away!". It was hard to keep going, but then when I got to the end, it was what I was saying in my head the whole time. There are actions and consequences. What should have happened didn't happen. Your character was lucky, really lucky. Pretty good read!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you. I was curious and wanted to learn more
This was very entertaining, wild and well filled with lots of description ;)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you so much
This is amazing! I really enjoyed reading this! Your writing style is so refreshing

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Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you m. stein fior the nice review
always fresh fierce and entertaining. With that hard, edgy real world humor. Another great chapter.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you again for the read and very nice comment
I always enjoy your story. This one was very entertaining. Some places life is filled with life and wild people and situations. I like the description of the location and the ending. Left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for the outstanding story.
Coyote

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thanks coyote for the read and fine review
Great descriptions, as always. You keep the reader reading, involved. Now, for one of my more in-depth edits-
1st paragraph
Third sentence is awfully long. and should be...while accountants wrote off...

2nd para
The last time i was drunk, I was on Belvedere, cursing out a woman for stealing my woman.
...I was a better man. I went to Maria's and grabbed...

4th para
delete the word "only from second sentence.
last sentence-change to-"He had long hair...

5th para
1st sentence
...and grabbed four Lokos...
4th sentence
"friends" not "friend"
5th sentence
"We threw one-liners at each other..."

6th para
3rd sentence
"You were an outsider and an enemy..."
4th sentence
"...community is out to convert..."

7th para
2nd sentence
"...straight man..."
7th sentence
"...few numbers..."
Not sure if the word "absorbing" works in this sentence. I'd look in a thesaurus for a better word.

8th para
1st sentence
"When I..."
last sentence
"...to see her little smile..."

9th para
You say you are not meeting women, then go on to say the ones you meet are full of games. You need to qualify the sentence by describing the kind of women you haven't met. Such as-
While fun and new, I wasn't meeting any down to earth women. The women I did meet were full of games and past damage.

3rd sentence
"...phone numbers..."
last sentence
"...emotional brow beating."

10th para
You need to complete your description of Tracy. You ended in the middle of a sentence.
8th sentence
"...did things a little differently up that way."

11th para
6th sentence
"Then we would fall in love..."

12 para
second sentence
"A little, blonde man..."
3rd sentence
"pockets"...while he stared ahead around...(use one or the other but not both.)

13th para
'Hi man..."

14th para
5th sentence
"...dark skinned man...

15th para
8th sentence
"...addiction.."
Did you mean the word stream or steam?

As always, I look forward to reading more!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you. very helpful!!!
Hey Pissassa! ... where did this come from bongo? Fantastic ... a giant leap ... a closet without mothballs ... man, you make a quick turn on that big Testarosa of yours!

A well planned piece of writing that teases, enthuses and then leaves the reader grasping for more ...
' don't let on ' ... that's gonna be the new word on adrenalin rushes. Well done Tonto!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

LOL gracias gracias
The reason I like Judas`s work is this...it is fast, big town writing, with a real American feeling, full of well observed backgrounds, almost journalistic, witty. I have never read anything from him that wasn`t excellent. Great.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you sir. I am honored when you take your time to read my writing attempts

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