Walkways of Ice Cream

Walkways of Ice Cream

A Poem by Judas Hammer
"

The Busways in Van Nuys were my escape from myself

"

Walkway of Ice Cream Dreams

 

I glide through Moonlight alleys

Trying my best to forecast what is

Around the next corner

Hoping it is neither: death or his brother destruction

 

For the moon is a better spectator than bodyguard

The potholes seem like craters

From the view of my semi lucent night vision

For this is the time of werewolves

And cat burglars

 

Yet here I am

Navigating the catacombs

 Of the Valley.

Disturbing the alley dwelling homeless

Sleeping on piss covered mattresses

and broken American dreams

I ignore them knowing their gaze

Will turn me to stone

Eye contact is not a luxury

 

I stare at the graffiti on the wall

The barrio hieroglyphic

Retelling the tales of ghetto warfare

The slain and unworthy

 

I point to God

To make me see

He still has me

 

The sounds of rocks beneath my feet

Sound like big men chewing bran cereal

 

The guy from the harbor city

The man from the east

The dreamer from the river city

Again walking through the alleys

 

Plotting a course of failure

Plotting a plan almost certain to fail

Because his mind has left him

His senses dulled

 

His only energy fueled by the fumes of

Past dreams and delusional fantasy

I think I saw a werewolf

© 2013 Judas Hammer


Author's Note

Judas Hammer
werewolves are beautiful.

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Great mental "blink shots". You could do a whole series of writes on the busways of cities. Nice concept. But..... I think you can leave off the last line, bit of over kill since you already mentioned werewolves earlier and much more poignantly than in the last line, it's obvious, you already saw werewolves... just my take. Nice stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review as usually my friend. Great words of advice. Thanks again.



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I agree with other reviewers. You can leave off the final line however I very much love these lines:

I stare at the graffiti on the wall
The barrio hieroglyphic
Retelling the tales of ghetto warfare
The slain and unworthy

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ahh...what a way of using those words...truly amazing :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


I liked the concept, wwell thought out. Good descriptions. Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thanks you
Great mental "blink shots". You could do a whole series of writes on the busways of cities. Nice concept. But..... I think you can leave off the last line, bit of over kill since you already mentioned werewolves earlier and much more poignantly than in the last line, it's obvious, you already saw werewolves... just my take. Nice stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review as usually my friend. Great words of advice. Thanks again.
Gorgeous imagery and prose. I like that I get a crystal-clear image of this alleyway in my head.
Unrelated theme-wise, but read Wallace Stevens' Emperor of Ice Cream. Think you'd like it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you very much. I like the picture, your cute
I love your Pen! It writes with a unique font! AWESOME READ! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

thank you soooo much. I'm humbled. thank for the read and review I shall return the favor
Real, raw and powerful. I know Van Nuys, so this reminds me of the time that I spent in the area, and neighboring Hollywood. You paint a vivid and absolute picture with great ease and flow. Nicely written. I shall be back to read more of your work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

Thank you. That means so much coming from you. I'm glad you liked it and hope to see you again.
i want to glide with you on this journey, well done, good read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Judas Hammer

11 Years Ago

Thank you. come to LA we will make a day of it well a night...
Thomas Fitzgerald

11 Years Ago

Tempting!

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Judas Hammer
Judas Hammer

The City of Angeles, CA



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