Redondo Beach

Got some bad new the other day---

Redondo Beach

I went to the beach today

The sun baptized my body

Wind baptized my soul

The roar of the ocean soothed my troubled mind

The thunder of the giant aquatic finger tips

Slamming into the Redondo sand

The mixing of the water and sand

Forces me to think about Jay

My friend

My brother in Christ

He called me two days ago

Past a night

Told me he had the HIV

Shocked

We talked

Then prayed

Like many times before

Hungry

Homeless

Angry

Poor

Since being out west

I have been touched by life

In the garden state I only knew:

Grilled chicken

Soft Ice cream

And the five O’clock new

 

I grit my teeth for Jay

He’s lived such a f*****g hard life!

I have lived such a f*****g hard life!

I slowly anger toward God

But remember he did nothing

Yet he is Everything.

The devil has a megaphone

planted in my right ear.

And for all those who said it could be worst

I wish a slowly painful day

 

A volleyball game snaps me to reality

Breaks me from my funk

I jump into the ocean

And rinse the self pity from

My carcass

And battle the waves

As I wonder

How many people

Pissed in this water?

Reviews

[razormuse]

Amazingly complex write. Emotions are so raw & real I could feel your pain, anger then ultimately humor albeit dark "How many people Pissed in this water?" I don't like to assume all Poems are personal accounts, sometimes I write about events that never happened but yet have touched me. I really liked this.

[TL Boehm]

I love this random, stream of thought type writing. The way we allow our mind to be organic and the the shocking things it comes to. Well done.

[tynamite]

I like how you manage to get all the different moods to flow together. This one is just emotional.

[Acron 4]

when one thinks of it , there have been so many people on this earth from the beginning till now that have numbered perhaps in the 100's of billions. If one thinks of it all the water on the earth was at one time more then likely urinated by all those people. But surely there are better things to consider and think on.

[Tree]

A moving, emotional poem. But in the last stanza you find yourself, or at least some temporary refuge/ in your dry wit, your humor. –––Good piece.

[honeyleens]

I like the flow of your writing, it's short and honest. You're not trying to hide any emotions. This poem takes you through a journey of sorts. Of feeling reborn, of finding difficulty, of pulling yourself up, and of enjoying a little humor. I really liked it. The ending made me giggle.

[frivolous treasures]

I feel the frustration shout out through your words. this was a very emotional poem that completely drew me in... I read it twice, and the second time was even better. Amazing write, maika'i no!

[Celestial Witch Child]

This poem has so many different moods and components within it, yet somehow it all flows quite nicely together.

[luvingu01]

end is quite funny but something has to snap us back to reality.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Wow! I'm sorry to hear about your friend. I love the retreat to the ocean and how expressive your feelings are with the piece. Thumbs up.