Controlled Burn

A mutual understanding of unbalanced love. A beautiful compromise or a deadly timebomb? Who knows? Who cares?

Relishing in the warmth of systematic chaos

As I devour the origami rose from your hands

You are adorned with my fresh laurel wreath

I fashioned with a cool and steady comprehension

              And with no apprehension   

For I fully know I give you gold for flaxen foil

Your regard for my heart grants sufficient weight

I follow your guidance yet I remain protected

Abandon all notions of injustice and deception

    There is only reception

Delighting in these fleeting bursts of heaven

Infused with our radiant mutual dysfunction

Never offering less than the honor of honesty

The lessons we could learn from play in safe spaces

    From our feisty, friendly faces

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

I really liked the imagery in this and honestly, it was was pretty great! If I could offer some advice, the line 'your regard for my heart grants sufficent weight' feels a little clunky, maybe rephrase it somehow? Other than that, I really enjoyed reading it!

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I really appreciate your input! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

That's alright, I'm glad I could help!

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I liked the honest tone and the directness of your words and thoughts. Nice flow f thoughts led to the strong end. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

*clears throat* Deadly timebomb

[emipoemi]

Strong imagery, rhymes in the right places, good musicality. Overall a good read! Well done!

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

[several thousand]

Wow, love this poem.
You've used choice language and chosen a strong recognisable structure.
I loved "Infused with our radiant mutual dysfunction" sums up a lot of things very well.
Thanks for sharing

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D

[Lovecraft]

I love the structure you incorporated into this. Love is utter chaos, it's beautiful and hateful, it is just plain crazy in what it can do to us, in how it affects us.

Very enjoyable poem, Fellow Traveler! :)

[Cobblestone Traveler]

"Beautiful and hateful"--what an apt description. Thank you so much for stopping by and reviewing.

[Lovecraft]

No problem. :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Like your choice of words and your sentiment in them. I had to google a lot f these words which I like, because it educates.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much! I tend to gravitate to complex words. I enjoy being taken out of the solid, block-like reality and toying around with fluidity.
I appreciate your review.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome! Good for you. Keep it up.