The Prism That We Are

You can be best friends with someone and also have a deeper connection that transcends platonic love.

I catch you unaware

And clutch you from behind

My head rests on your back

Lilac.

I've got you in my arms

You laugh and lean into me 

Your warmth floods my soul

Amber.

Our friendship is a hybrid

Of rose and sunflower

Exotic yet gentle 

Yellow.

You finally turn around

I look up into your eyes

They pierce and lock me down

Sapphire.

We give into the silence 

The world goes out of focus

You draw out a hot shiver

Crimson.

I'm woven into you

I would give you anything

You could request the stars

Gold.

And now I've lost my breath

My every muscle tense

Exploding in liquid rapture

Silver.

You break your weighted gaze

The sound returns to my ears

We resume our walk

Green.

We walk along the river

Never having to explain

For our moment floats on

Clear.

Author's Note

"Love" Award, I Wanna Hear Your Words in Poetry Contest, 6/20/16

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Clever idea to show the various aspects of love using a few vividly stated lines for each color, as tho light is split into these colors thru a prism. I'm not feeling a distinct connection between each stated concept & the color you've selected to represent it, but I just like the overall idea. I might've tried to align the colors in the order which corresponds with the rainbow, as colors would be ordered by shining light thru a prism, but it's not a big deal. Your descriptions of love in each case are original sounding & nicely sensory. Your byline statement (under the title) is a bit misleading & doesn't really correspond so well with the message in your poem.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences with hues of the emotion attached to them. I appreciate you taking the time to read!

[heather]

you won the "love" award in my contest about two months ago, i came back to read this poem again and love it as much as i did then

[Cobblestone Traveler]

That is a wonderful thing to hear. Thank you so much!

[slightly terrified]

I love how you've used colors to display your feelings. Sometimes we can't express our feelings into words and a color is the only way that really suits it! Or at least that is how I feel. Beautifully written!

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much for your kind words!

[Davidgeo]

Those contests are fugging stupid. But this poem is quite nice. You're a fantastic writer. You get a little melodramatic at the end of this one though. Is clear the lack of color or all the colors combining? White light is all the colors, technically speaking. Amber is a stupid awesome color.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you, HansJizzy. Clear has a double meaning in this case. For one, it's a lack of color, noticed by no one else. And two, it's "clear" to them that the moment they had was special.

[Davidgeo]

Transcendent is that moment, an epiphany type of party but then it ends... and, the rest happens. Eh... it's all quite nice, thank you for clarifying. You don't have to go on, I make what I want of things anyway, it's more fun that way I thinks.

[Zaliodir]

I was attracted by the title, and I was not disappointed. The poem is beautiful, and fulfilling. If I could describe my relationship in colors, this would be it. The thing I love most about the colors, is they seem to convey feelings, and smells, as well as images. Thank you for a wonderfully deep poem.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much for the high praise. It makes me happy you found it fulfilling. :D

[Dave]

A prism showing off all the colors of your love, beautiful.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

[Dave]

It truly was a pleasure to read. - Thank you.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Beautiful. You have indeed woven a prism of wonderful colours with your words

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I appreciate your kind words!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Nice poem! It felt very heartfelt and warm, and smooth! Amazing!

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you!! So glad you enjoyed it!

[Gray]

To naturally come together in such a way and relate each aspect of the friendship with colors is a great way to look at it. Feelings can overwhelm us when we least expect it. Nice writing.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Your kind review is much appreciated. :D

[An owl on the moon]

This is so beautiful, so tender. Yes, here is a deep love that transcends all else, and weaves itself within us in connections that make the world awaken in magic. You express it so well.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Thank you so much. It is indeed a living magic to be so close to someone.