Clever idea to show the various aspects of love using a few vividly stated lines for each color, as tho light is split into these colors thru a prism. I'm not feeling a distinct connection between each stated concept & the color you've selected to represent it, but I just like the overall idea. I might've tried to align the colors in the order which corresponds with the rainbow, as colors would be ordered by shining light thru a prism, but it's not a big deal. Your descriptions of love in each case are original sounding & nicely sensory. Your byline statement (under the title) is a bit misleading & doesn't really correspond so well with the message in your poem.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences.. read moreThank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences with hues of the emotion attached to them. I appreciate you taking the time to read!
Clever idea to show the various aspects of love using a few vividly stated lines for each color, as tho light is split into these colors thru a prism. I'm not feeling a distinct connection between each stated concept & the color you've selected to represent it, but I just like the overall idea. I might've tried to align the colors in the order which corresponds with the rainbow, as colors would be ordered by shining light thru a prism, but it's not a big deal. Your descriptions of love in each case are original sounding & nicely sensory. Your byline statement (under the title) is a bit misleading & doesn't really correspond so well with the message in your poem.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences.. read moreThank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences with hues of the emotion attached to them. I appreciate you taking the time to read!
I love how you've used colors to display your feelings. Sometimes we can't express our feelings into words and a color is the only way that really suits it! Or at least that is how I feel. Beautifully written!
Those contests are fugging stupid. But this poem is quite nice. You're a fantastic writer. You get a little melodramatic at the end of this one though. Is clear the lack of color or all the colors combining? White light is all the colors, technically speaking. Amber is a stupid awesome color.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you, HansJizzy. Clear has a double meaning in this case. For one, it's a lack of color, notice.. read moreThank you, HansJizzy. Clear has a double meaning in this case. For one, it's a lack of color, noticed by no one else. And two, it's "clear" to them that the moment they had was special.
8 Years Ago
Transcendent is that moment, an epiphany type of party but then it ends... and, the rest happens. E.. read moreTranscendent is that moment, an epiphany type of party but then it ends... and, the rest happens. Eh... it's all quite nice, thank you for clarifying. You don't have to go on, I make what I want of things anyway, it's more fun that way I thinks.
I was attracted by the title, and I was not disappointed. The poem is beautiful, and fulfilling. If I could describe my relationship in colors, this would be it. The thing I love most about the colors, is they seem to convey feelings, and smells, as well as images. Thank you for a wonderfully deep poem.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much for the high praise. It makes me happy you found it fulfilling. :D
To naturally come together in such a way and relate each aspect of the friendship with colors is a great way to look at it. Feelings can overwhelm us when we least expect it. Nice writing.
This is so beautiful, so tender. Yes, here is a deep love that transcends all else, and weaves itself within us in connections that make the world awaken in magic. You express it so well.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much. It is indeed a living magic to be so close to someone.