The Prism That We Are

The Prism That We Are

A Poem by Cobblestone Traveler
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You can be best friends with someone and also have a deeper connection that transcends platonic love.

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I catch you unaware
And clutch you from behind
My head rests on your back
Lilac.

I've got you in my arms
You laugh and lean into me 
Your warmth floods my soul
Amber.

Our friendship is a hybrid
Of rose and sunflower
Exotic yet gentle 
Yellow.

You finally turn around
I look up into your eyes
They pierce and lock me down
Sapphire.

We give into the silence 
The world goes out of focus
You draw out a hot shiver
Crimson.

I'm woven into you
I would give you anything
You could request the stars
Gold.

And now I've lost my breath
My every muscle tense
Exploding in liquid rapture
Silver.

You break your weighted gaze
The sound returns to my ears
We resume our walk
Green.

We walk along the river
Never having to explain
For our moment floats on
Clear.

© 2016 Cobblestone Traveler


Author's Note

Cobblestone Traveler
"Love" Award, I Wanna Hear Your Words in Poetry Contest, 6/20/16

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Clever idea to show the various aspects of love using a few vividly stated lines for each color, as tho light is split into these colors thru a prism. I'm not feeling a distinct connection between each stated concept & the color you've selected to represent it, but I just like the overall idea. I might've tried to align the colors in the order which corresponds with the rainbow, as colors would be ordered by shining light thru a prism, but it's not a big deal. Your descriptions of love in each case are original sounding & nicely sensory. Your byline statement (under the title) is a bit misleading & doesn't really correspond so well with the message in your poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences.. read more



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you won the "love" award in my contest about two months ago, i came back to read this poem again and love it as much as i did then

Posted 8 Years Ago


Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

That is a wonderful thing to hear. Thank you so much!
Clever idea to show the various aspects of love using a few vividly stated lines for each color, as tho light is split into these colors thru a prism. I'm not feeling a distinct connection between each stated concept & the color you've selected to represent it, but I just like the overall idea. I might've tried to align the colors in the order which corresponds with the rainbow, as colors would be ordered by shining light thru a prism, but it's not a big deal. Your descriptions of love in each case are original sounding & nicely sensory. Your byline statement (under the title) is a bit misleading & doesn't really correspond so well with the message in your poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your constructive review! There was no pattern to the colors, just various experiences.. read more
I love how you've used colors to display your feelings. Sometimes we can't express our feelings into words and a color is the only way that really suits it! Or at least that is how I feel. Beautifully written!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words!
Those contests are fugging stupid. But this poem is quite nice. You're a fantastic writer. You get a little melodramatic at the end of this one though. Is clear the lack of color or all the colors combining? White light is all the colors, technically speaking. Amber is a stupid awesome color.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you, HansJizzy. Clear has a double meaning in this case. For one, it's a lack of color, notice.. read more
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

Transcendent is that moment, an epiphany type of party but then it ends... and, the rest happens. E.. read more
I was attracted by the title, and I was not disappointed. The poem is beautiful, and fulfilling. If I could describe my relationship in colors, this would be it. The thing I love most about the colors, is they seem to convey feelings, and smells, as well as images. Thank you for a wonderfully deep poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the high praise. It makes me happy you found it fulfilling. :D
A prism showing off all the colors of your love, beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Dave

8 Years Ago

It truly was a pleasure to read. - Thank you.
Beautiful. You have indeed woven a prism of wonderful colours with your words

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

I appreciate your kind words!
Nice poem! It felt very heartfelt and warm, and smooth! Amazing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you!! So glad you enjoyed it!
To naturally come together in such a way and relate each aspect of the friendship with colors is a great way to look at it. Feelings can overwhelm us when we least expect it. Nice writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Your kind review is much appreciated. :D
This is so beautiful, so tender. Yes, here is a deep love that transcends all else, and weaves itself within us in connections that make the world awaken in magic. You express it so well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cobblestone Traveler

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much. It is indeed a living magic to be so close to someone.

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Added on June 1, 2016
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Tags: Colors, friendship, love, attraction, sex, unspoken


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