My Eyes

See my eyes
See the gate
A thing I've come
To despise and hate
But here's a heart
Cracked and frayed
Wishing someone
Would take it away
Different pieces
Of my soul
Different pieces
As part of a whole
The gate stays open
Waiting for one
The heart is broken
Waiting for one
There is one
Let her come in
Are you the one
Who will get locked in?

Reviews

[TK]

I loved it! Dafina is right, you are very talented. I enjoyed the rhythm and when the gates close, the one will be there waiting for you.

[Mason Rayburn]

That's definitely the hope. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Dafina]

Another great one!! You are talented! And if this is how you feel, I really hope you find the "one" :)

[Mason Rayburn]

Like anyone else that desires someone to love, I'm just waiting for my "one". Thank you for the encouragement. :3

[journaling_thesp]

I love the rythm and rhyming you used here, and the imagery.

[Mason Rayburn]

Rhythm is definitely what I use most when creating poems. Rhyming doesn't always come easy, so rhythm fills the gaps. I've been told a lot that my word choice is unique. Nice to know that my words can create an image for the reader. :3