Soul-Burst
A Book by Club
 Andrew Kane is a soul burst agent and has a dream of becoming the strongest soul burst agent. However he must face corruption, greed and most of all...The Dark Forces  © 2016 Club
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I'm not a good writer so take that into account.
Also i have high school so i can't promise i'll be able to publish a new chapter every week
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Thanks for sharing your chapter, Club. I like the way your characters talk to each other. It sounds real. One area where I think you could improve is when you describe things. I would suggest not being so exact (for example, giving their height and exactly what they're wearing), but instead be a little more descriptive (for example saying something like, "Kyle was muscular and towered over Andrew" or "Andrew and Kyle both wore the new Soul Burst uniforms of dark colors that didn't show the dirt when they had to crawl out to peer at enemy lines."). Keep writing -- it takes practice!
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
my goodness thank you :P
I'm still a mediocre writer and i love your review. Thank you and i'.. read moremy goodness thank you :P
I'm still a mediocre writer and i love your review. Thank you and i'll be sure to work on fixing my mistakes
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Thanks for sharing your chapter, Club. I like the way your characters talk to each other. It sounds real. One area where I think you could improve is when you describe things. I would suggest not being so exact (for example, giving their height and exactly what they're wearing), but instead be a little more descriptive (for example saying something like, "Kyle was muscular and towered over Andrew" or "Andrew and Kyle both wore the new Soul Burst uniforms of dark colors that didn't show the dirt when they had to crawl out to peer at enemy lines."). Keep writing -- it takes practice!
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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8 Years Ago
my goodness thank you :P
I'm still a mediocre writer and i love your review. Thank you and i'.. read moremy goodness thank you :P
I'm still a mediocre writer and i love your review. Thank you and i'll be sure to work on fixing my mistakes
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