Stream Of Consciousness

I crumble

Fall

Becoming nothing

 

Can you become nothing?

I have no idea

maybe.

 

I feel like I can

But is it just a feeling?

or

 

Can you actually optain

Nothingness?

sometimes...

 

I

Wish

I

Could

Just

Dissapear.

 

It would be great

To not have to worry anymore

No longer seeing myself in a mirror

 

No longer having feeling

No feeling to

Experiance..

 

Hearbreak

Lust

Love

Pain

 

No longer would I

Cry

Cut

Create

 

It would be great

I would be free

I am already empty

 

I crumble

Fall

Hit the dirt

And i dont get up.

Author's Note

Just venting probably some mistakes. Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

The piece certainly gives the feeling of crumbling in the way you laid it out. That helps carry your theme more solidly. The poem brings to me a vision of one who views themselves as a ghost, stuck in limbo between to worlds, the real one and the one they never wish they had been a part of, or never hoped to become. My belief is that no one should ever get to such a point, for it shows a flaw in the society we live in, both on the family side as well as beyond.

Nice flow, honest and tangible.

Aaron