The Stud

Bob was built like a truck and had a scowl that could curdle milk. When his sixteen-year-old daughter Jasmine told him she had a date tonight, he spent the rest of the afternoon looking in the mirror, practicing his death stare. He wasn't satisfied until the glass cracked.

When the doorbell rang, Bob smiled for the first time in weeks. Showtime.

He reached the front door just as Jasmine was stepping outside.

"Bye, Daddy!"

Bob cleared his throat. "Just a second."

Jasmine froze, going stiff in doorway. A young boy appeared next to her. He wore sunglasses, a leather jacket, and a cocky smirk. Bob hated him immediately.

Bob narrowed his eyes. "Hello," he said in his lowest voice.

"Sup, man." The boy put one hand in his pocket and slid the other around Jasmine's shoulders.

Bob's eye twitched. Oh hell no. He gave the kid his glass-shattering glare.

"You should get that tic looked at."

Bob took a deep breath in. "You're lucky I'm already on probation. What's your name, hotshot?"

"Dean."

"Alright, Dean, what are your intentions with my daughter?"

Jasmine bit her lip, knowing from experience what was about to happen. Bob grinned sadistically.

"Well, sir," Dean said, pulling Jasmine closer to him. "I hope to have your daughter in bed by 10 and home by midnight."

Author's Note

Just another shortie to get back in the swing of things.

Reviews

[Hyacinth]

This is awesome! I love the little things, like Deans arm around his daughter and his subtle remarks. This is amazing.

Also, and ignore this if it's not, but is that Dean the one and only Dean Winchester? The attitude and the leather jacket reminds me of him.

[Jacob Clifford]

I didn't think of this Dean being Dean Winchester, but I can totally see it now. I'm really glad you mentioned that. Thank you for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Stan Lee]

Dean, What a cocky character! And Bob is super. I could picture them all in this setting. Another great "shortie" Clifford. :) I enjoy your writing style. Entertaining and easy to read. :)

[Jacob Clifford]

Glad you enjoyed this little ditty. Thank you for reading.

[matrixmark]

A really good piece.Great imagery of a father looking out for this daughter. Bob felt like some kind of drill instructor to me with a huge puffed out chest and the beefiest of arms.

Loved the cocky Dean, found the last line very amusing. I could picture Bob's eybrows rising as he frowned down upon Dean. And jasmine just standing theri like a spare part.

A great read i have to say.

Mark.

[Jacob Clifford]

Your picture of Bob is exactly what I had in mind when writing this story. And I also see Jasmine "just standing there like a spare part". Very good mental imagery you have. Thanks for reading.

[matrixmark]

Pleaure was mine to read such a good piece.

Mark.

[barleygirl]

This is killer good! I'm loving this! Your descriptions are so intense & snappy & compelling. This might be one of your best that I've read so far. Or maybe I'm just in the Halloween mode lately, so I love it when people clash to the death, such as these dueling men who each think they're hot s**t. You have developed this "hot s**t" countenance so very well for each guy. I'm feeling the tension. I love little comments like: "OH HELL NO!" Your dialogue, even imaginary self-talk, sounds exactly as we would say it, under these circumstances. By the way "tic" is when you have a twitch (not "tick"). That line was so freakin' good, now I wonder if I still have time to squeeze in another dreadful message before I turn over a new leaf & start to write in a nauseatingly thankful way for the month of November! *heh! heh! heh!* I'm so jealous of this . . . I wish I'd written it. Now I'm inspired to wipe your juvenile nose with my notebook paper! (((HUGS)))

[Jacob Clifford]

Thank you for your thoughts. I'm thrilled the tension is coming through for people. I really wasn't expecting much for this piece, but I'm glad it's enjoyable. Your views of the two guys are absolutely correct: they both think they're hot s**t. They are basically two dumb apes measuring their willies. And thanks for telling me about "tic". I would have been pretty -ticked- off if no one told me and I found out about it later. I would love to see a final Halloweenish story, if you're feeling up to it.

[barleygirl]

Well, Halloween is over & the only person left to slay is Trump . . . & I'm trying to stay quasi-neutral about this election in my minimal writing about it! *heh! heh! heh!* I just love your line: "to dumb apes measuring their willies" . . . this one aspect of male machismo could be the main topic of a very fun write! (((HUGS)))

[PhoenixDown]

Oh Clifford.... YES!

For what this is - this is written near perfectly. Just the right amount of descriptions & I love how you have twisted Bob's perspective so masterfully into the mix. I f*****g love this character if I can say without being too blunt. I think this is an awesome piece of work that you can do a lot with. I do not hate this Bob character or look down on him. Even though he may not turn out to be the nicest guy there is, but hell - Dean has it coming.

This is so interesting and seems a bit unlike you. I love it. Maybe comment on this again. Keep up this fire Clifford. This piece sings!

Phoenix

[Jacob Clifford]

Wow, I wasn't expecting such an enthusiastic review of this piece. I'm very glad Bob's character stands out to you. And yeah, Dean has it coming, for sure. I may just have to do something more with this piece in the near future. Thanks for reading.

[PhoenixDown]

Of course man. The chemistry here is incredible. There is no real "hero" to turn to, making Bob seem quite commendable (considering all of the hints & such). My pleasure my brother. I really enjoyed this.

[Lizzy Morgan]

This immediately grabbed my attention. I'm not a fan of reading books, but if this was a book, it would keep me occupied!! lol

[Jacob Clifford]

I'm glad it caught your attention despite not being your cup of tea. Thanks for reading.