Pray for your God

 

“Pray for your God”

by Joshua Giacometti

           

Grace, can you hear me speaking to you?

            Aye, your face is bleeding centipedes.

 

Open yourself suck the spirit

from the mouth of dimensions, sadly

enveloping five fingers, formed, mad.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Alexis Pena (Goco)]

your work has a very real literary quality and affection.
Alexis

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Another good solid piece, filled with strong imagery and language. Your writing has grown so much! It is awesome =) My only suggestion would be in this line:

"Open yourself suck the spirit"--- i would place a comma after "yourself". It just feels like there should be a break there. And when you read it (at least when i do) you naturally want to pause slightly at that part. I think it would flow more nicely with a comma. But that is just personal opinion (as always), so take it as you will.

Cheers

Well written and good form

short and succint

A good piece

[Lionel Braud]

that was really fun to read, and fun for the mind to play with, I write in a surrealist mode myself, it is the only language that makes sense to me as a writer.

[Blackbirdsong]

Just the image of a face bleeding centipedes is a powerful one. I could just fixate on that line and be satisfied from the imagery and power of that. The next three lines have so much mystery in them and along with the title I feel a story hinting at being told and I love that you don't give us all the details, but let our imaginations send us forth. A wonderful poetic gem.