Thoughts

Which way do I fall?

A night like this gives me the fire I need to warm your cold words. Maybe, deep in my mind I can find the feelings to love every abusive move you make. You hurt me, but you play it off as if its nothing. When you bite me, I feel the venom running through my veins, its torturous, pure evil!

               But some how my heart screams when I try to depart from you. I am fond of your voice, even though it scares me sometimes. I’ve heard the things your ex-girlfriends say you’ve done, but I still stray from the truth. I can’t let myself be in pain, but I cant let myself lose you. I guess I’ll let my thoughts pile up like a load of dirty laundry….

Reviews

[UncleFossil]

I will be fair with this one; my reviews based upon articles that I have out there might come off longer than the review itself. Clarisee when taking part in submission calls and anthology-frameworks don't be shy to hit longer range. Some of the reviews on here may end up seeing a contrast when those who might not researched FictionPress.com or WattPad.com for example - there are works on that site that fall within the 2400-3800 word-count perimeter even those works as good a few are face rejection from magazines or not even given that heads up. So my suggestion hike up the word-count if invited for an anthology that's Creative Nonfiction or doing a chapbook on MagCloud.com you can thank me later.

[Papaya]

That opening line is fantastic and hooks the reader immediately to follow through with the read.
Good write, Clarisse. Is that picture of Wilbur Soot from Lovejoy?

[Clarisse]

that's who this writing is about!

[Papaya]

Nice. Thought he looked familiar.

[Clarisse]

he's hot...

[Papaya]

My daughter thinks so too

[Franky]

You are definitely a talented poet. It's not easy either!

I hope this is fiction?

[Clarisse]

oh, this def is, i mean, at least you think so. some other person hated the one i made called 'What do you want to be when you grow up?'

[Clarisse]

i meant to say, its fiction. AND i'm glad you think im a good writer...