APOCOLYPSE

In two stanzas.

The moon stands her silent watch.
The sky is falling, the stars are falling,
exploding into diamond dust.

Dust scattered on the wind.
Ashes scattered on the wind.
All is dust and ashes when the great fire is burnt out.
We ourselves are ashes when the great fire burns out.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think...

Reviews

[EloisaWrites]

First, isn't the title supposed to be spelled, 'Apocalypse'? :)
Well, Apocalypse is one of my most favorite word so I was really intrigued in seeing your title. And I love what you wrote! In two stanzas, the world has come to an end. But, you know, there is also something very romantic with the way you construct your words. And when I read it, even though it is supposed to be very apocalyptic, I fell in love with the images it created. Especially, with this lines:

The sky is falling, the stars are falling,
exploding into diamond dust.

Great job! :)

[Clairvoyant]

I did spell it wrong yes, I must admit it was a mistake at first, but then I decided I liked the way it looked, so I was going to leave it, maybe it would catch someones eye! (it worked!) I'm very happy to hear you enjoyed it and that it moved you. I have been writing for years but only recently have found the bravery to share it at all.

[EloisaWrites]

It's good that you have decided to finally share your works. You can really composed moving and very effective poem. Like you, I also hesitated for the longest time on sharing my works. But then, it is always very comforting and wonderful when someone appreciates our words. I appreciate yours. :)

[Clairvoyant]

Thank you for your kind words. It is nerve wracking to share something that comes from so deep down, I am truly happy that you enjoyed it, I am never certain of my work but you have helped me to gain some confidence! I shall read some of yours as well when I get some time. :)

[EloisaWrites]

You should have some confidence. I'll appreciate it if you took the time to read mine. Thanks. :)

[Clairvoyant]

I certainly will, please forgive me if it takes a few days for I have quite a busy schedule at times.

[Rob Santana]

I like how you spelled apocalypse different, that's cool. But most important I like this poem. Straight forward and truthful when you speak of people ending up as ashes. Creative piece.

[Clairvoyant]

Thank you much!

[Muse]

Interesting use of repetition. It's very effective in getting your message felt. Great title choice too...it had me curious....what could be so terrible? You described a dry desolate earth...like a self-inflicted wound...it burns itself open.

[Clairvoyant]

Thank you for reviewing my work! I am thrilled that I managed to paint such a potent picture in your mind. Your review itself is poetic.

[costa siwale]

Clairvoyant! This is a marvelous piece, what a fantasy, properly delivered, I like your work, just beautiful

[Clairvoyant]

I am so happy that you enjoyed it! Your words mean a lot to me

[R. L. Hill]

I enjoyed this. A quick read, yes, but the words bring about a sense of dreaming as though this destruction is just the moon's dream.

[Clairvoyant]

Thank you! I am so happy that my words could move you. I was hoping to have a bit of a dreamy sense to it, I am thankful that you have confirmed this for me.

[Glitter]

It's interesting. I like it. It leaves much to be interpreted, but I like it that way. Very well done.

[Clairvoyant]

Thank you for your kind words! I do like to write in a way that leaves things open to interpretation, I am happy to hear you appreciate it!