Nightfall

A poem I wrote about a year ago. It's dark, and I think at the time it was supposed to tell the story of a man losing himself.

Nightfall

I am dark and still.  I move for no one.
Whatever you see I surround in darkness,
Changing and modifying the normal you know.
I am mysterious, but not unknown---
A puzzle of shadows within your expanses.
Residing only where brightness lacks,
In corners where no light touches.
I believe it my home.  But it shifts.
Now I am the blackness within a man's mind
and heart.  He looks to me when
the shadows become to definate in his life.
He indulges me with weakened cries and painful sobs.
He relies on my secrets.  He can lose himself
for a moment, always knowing what awaits in the morning.
In me the young boy fades, and in the morning the sun rises,
revealing the troubled man of too many years...

Author's Note

I tried as best i could to mirror it after Silvia Plath, more specifically her poem entitled 'mirrors'. It probably doesn't even come close, but you know I can only do so much. Needless to say, it's a bit dark...(hehe irony)

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Very nice! It flowed well, and the images were strong, at the same time very mental, making one have to use their own imagination to complete the pictures.

A wonderful piece of craftsmanship.

I liked how the poem lines got longer towards then end. Created a wonderful image of a mans will power to live just slowly sag to the floor, as if they were melting.

Good Write! Keep up the good work!

Aaron Maycroft

[Muddy B.]

NICE POEM........IT WAS NICLEY WRITTEN AND THE FLOW WAS BEAUTIFUL.AND THE DARKNESS OF IT MAKES IT A TAD BIT MORE INTERESTING TO READ.IT CAUGHT MY ATTENTION IMMEDIATELY.................NICE WRITE

[Bre]

that is really good and dark lol