Alive

Some product of a broken home

Flooded by tears

Born in a weep, the lullaby

I still hear in my sleep

And that won’t stop

Or fade

 

Bathed in waters tainted with pink

Drops from the wounds that you could never heal

Raised in pieces

Holding my cuts from broken glass

That I would pick

Between the screams

And where my innocence was smashed

 

I would hold up my breath

Long before I could speak

And I would close my eyes

For this to disappear

I used to hope that I would disappear

But nightmares would go on

As sun would rise

 

 

Somewhere I’ll be bleeding

Always

 

 

But I’m alive and standing up

Definitely fragile but not fully broken

I'm bruised

But made it through

As endless as it seemed

I am alive

I made it 

I survived...

Reviews

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Superb, An over used quote is 'Things in life that cause you pain will serve to make you stronger' I am afraid to say that is is utter rubbish. Things in life that cause you pain do not make you stronger, they just make you too cautious and fearful to expose your self to that environment again. You get stronger when you learn to forgive evil actions by contaminated souls, learn of the things that made them happen and learn what they mean to you. With these sparks you build the firs inside of you to enlighten your own soul. My past is from abuse and darkness but I came to learn that we must exist forever in darkness before we can truly know and appreciate the light. Just to write these words show how far you have come so yes 'Believe you have made it through' these words show you have.

[Acer]

Deepness...nicely expressed.

[KeeD]

Raised in pieces - amazing.

And here's the Hope I was aching for through the poem


But I’m alive and standing up
I can’t believe I have turned out into a sane
Healthy, heartfelt woman
Definitely fragile but not fully broken
I'm bruised
But made it through

Really wonderful write, full of emotion and struggle but also the emergence of a butterfly from a cocoon towards the end.

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem, very emotional and deep, love the second stanza...it shows a lot of anger, hate love...great job

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I enjoyed this read especially the line:

"Healthy, heartfelt woman
Definitely fragile but not fully broken"

Are you familiar with the song "Alive" by Pearl Jam, one of the most influential songs in my musical memory.

[Hannah Jocks]

This was an amazing write that i absolutly enjoyed. (: I would love it if you could check out my writing and give me a few pointers(:

[Stanley Wilson]

great poem

[Scott S]

Claire, this is great work. The brutality of abuse is something that can only be fully imagined, by those who are subjected to it. You put your tragedy on paper for all to see....I commend you for that. It's great that you are a survivor. As a former police officer, I have seen countless victims who did not fare so well. I am glad that you are able to remain strong and to write so passionately. I love your choice of words in this piece....you really bring it to life. Nice job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Eloha]

"Long before I could speak

And I would close my eyes

For this to disappear "

Some interesting phrasing, I really liked some of the poetic devices in the first half. The ending stanza to me losses it's power in cliche sentimentalism. But of course, that's just my literary opinion.