Once upon a time I was drawn

Once upon a time I was drawn

To a light of a kind unknown

Revealed only in the dim of the night

True witness of a miracle

Leaving me breathless as beauty

Was softly calling upon me

A secret so preciously brought

A jewel pure and vulnerable

In a box that unfolds with trust

As love is weaved and truth whispered

When two souls lighting up in gold

Alter the color of the world

It was the brutal light of day

The rhythm that takes us away

That steals our eyes into the fog

And wraps a cage around our hearts

That makes us flee as one hopes to escape
The violence of the world

The more I reached the more you ran

And just one morning you were gone

Eaten away by a ferocious fear

And I could never again have you near

Cause it was wider than your hopes

And stronger than your dreams

I’ve looked in your heart for a breach

My hands got lost trying to reach

But at night I squeeze my eyelids

Like a child wishing for a dream

To unfold this treasure again

So I would never love the same

I wish I’d go back to that room

When we were all precious and bloom

And I would sleep there forever

Melt in fusion into one another

And I would take your hand in mine

Until the end of time

Author's Note

Ok I think I really like this one... let me know.

Photo credit : http://www.flickr.com/photos/sinestesie/3049544163/

Reviews

[Forest Green]

Poetic completion...each verse an expression of the movements unseen, within the mind, within the beating heart, finally the being is made at one with a transcending spirit that surpasses reason. You have a poet's sensitivity to the finer elements of pure emotion.

[cfix]

I think this is elegant and somewhat soft in a way. I guess it was the way that I read it. I liked it alot. The softness of it is such a beauty. Even though i can feel the pain as well i feel a caress suside on the heart. Well done!

[Claude]

What a beautiful piece. The mood changes so fluidly. Well done!

[Cliff Rhodes]

yes.., I like this one too.
Very nice memories and a beautiful view into your world,..thanks for sharing.

[Gomer LePoet]

this is quite sweet and I like the format you utilized of the off tempo rhymings.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

This sounds like childhood innocence to me. Before a small one with innocuous intentions is introduce to the world of pain. Imagination runs rampant, painting pictures of fluorescent enchantment that makes us gasp with pure wonderment. But the more we seek such possibilities in the real world, the further it drifts from our grasp. Delightful imagery that lulls us into a state of melancholy. I adored it.

[Liza]

this was wonderful
it ignited all the senses
full of emotion and insight

[AreWeBothCrazy]

This is beautifully written. Your words flow very nicely and I really like the sound and rhythm of the whole thing. Well done

[c.m.]

I wish I’d go back to that room
When we were all precious and bloom
And I would sleep there forever
Melt in fusion into one another
And I would take your hand in mine
Until the end of time

That stanza is beautiful, and the last line is just perfection. I love how all of it was leading up to that perfectly, like so many other poems fail to do. A very well done piece indeed.

[Voice]

This is really breathtaking! It flows very elegantly. I absolutely love what you have done with this piece. Great write!!!

Voice

[OR]

Poems like this makes me feel small :)
Good job

my fav :
"The more I reached the more you ran

And just one morning you were gone"