Broken Heart

My heart is like

A flower,

Beautiful

And in full bloom.

Yet fragile,

Very fragile.

Subject to wind

And rain,

Eroding away

Bit by bit

Into nothingness

But I hold the stem

As my heart floats away

Like a balloon

And I hold the string

As my heart

Is chipped and carved

Like a rare crystal

And I gather the pieces

And I glue them back

In place

To form a flower.

Reviews

[Ban Heo]

there is so much here. I really like the image of a flower wilting away, then being a balloon, then being broken fragments, then being a flower again. With that said, I really wish you would SHOW the frailty instead of saying it. For example, "Yet fragile, very fragile." You're giving too much away. The description that follows is closer to what would add to this poem. Great job.

[CindyLu]

Thank you! I'll try to improve it :)

[Emily]

Beautifully done! I love the ebb and the flow to this piece-there is definitely a transformation and redemption to it. I love the idea that your heart is like a crystal- a diamond must be cut before it can sparkle! Thank you for sharing. I love your imagery!

[CindyLu]

Thank you! I hadn't even thought about that :)

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully constructed. from like a flower to a flower.

[CindyLu]

thank you :)

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[MrKnowAll]

I have to say that this poem is amazing. I really enjoyed reading , because it also taught me something. The poem teaches us that a heart may get broken, but it's not the end, no sir.

Thanks for sharing!

[CindyLu]

thank you! That's exactly what I was trying to put across, how enduring the heart really is. I'm glad you like it :)