Lies

Words

That drip

Like acid

From my tongue

Lies

That fill      

     The holes                 

In my truth                              

 

 

Graceful dancer

On my lips

 

Do you really believe

The things I say?

Reviews

[C.C. Marx]

maybe i shouldnt believe you, but believe me when i say this is well done!!

[White Ink]

hmm... do i?

I like pieces that have open endings.. where i find myself bouncing off the last word into my own thoughts..

Nice :)

[Baby Ricochet]

People believe what they want to believe. Love the first stanza

[Lina Grey]

Love the question ending hun. Short and sweet, but deep and provoking as well. Nice write love

[sithlordjp]

Most intriguing... The layout of the words, the silence between the words. Very effective, well done!

[Ban Heo]

I find myself wishing that the formed looked a little different. Like...if it made a shape or had some kind of visual effect that really worked with the poem. I can appreciate where this is going though. It reads very nicely.

[CindyLu]

Thanks! I'll see about that :)

[MrKnowAll]

The structure, the poetic sayings, what not to like here?
and I liked "graceful dancer on my lips" the most, just somehow figuratively it fits so well.

Thank you for sharing!

[CindyLu]

Thank you :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I love this! Already added it to my favorites (: being a middle school girl and all, I definitely know a thing or two about lies.

"Words
That drip
Like acid
From my tongue"

That's a very good description of lies... I would say this is "short and sweet" although lies aren't sweet, you know what I meant.. It's short and to the point, but displays a very good message.

"Lies
That fill
The holes
In my truth"

Wow, this is just perfect. Beautiful job with this Cindy, i love it!

[CindyLu]

Thank you :)

[Distant horizons]

Yep, until proven otherwise. Lies that fill the holes in my truth? Beautifully put.

[CindyLu]

Thank you :)

[Distant horizons]

Welcome :-)