I was hurting

Writing my sadness in words

I was hurting
When you told me to snap out of it
I was hurting

When you told me to fix myself
I was hurting

When you told me that I'm selfish
I was hurting 
When you told me that I'm being dramatic 

I was hurting
When you told me that It happens to everyone
As if mine is something that 
should matter.

I was hurting 

When you refused to listen
I was hurting
When you told me you'll hurt me
I was hurting
When you told me that you didn't care
I was hurting

When you told me to stop crying.

I was hurting
Until you decided to listen to me.

But then I lost my words
When you told me that it was all my fault

As if I wanted it...

Author's Note

Hii, this is my first poem! Hope you like it. :)

Reviews

[Kat]

I loved reading this poem and I can relate to this poem and I can tell you the pain will stop after a while and your an amazing writer let poetry be your outlet keep it up!

[John the Baptist]

Not exactly a shoulder to cry on here. There are those of us who don't empathize too well. The addressee in this work has no comprehension of the pain of others, does not seem to care. Such often come to regret their ways, but by then it is often too late.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Too powerful. But wow, this is so wonderfully penned. I could feel the emotion in these words. I'm at a loss for words with this review. It all comes down to me saying this poem is perfectly explained and expressed and I hope venting took some of the hurt away. tyfs

[barleygirl]

This is a poem full of feeling, especially for a first poem! Congrats in getting started! I hope your experience at the cafe is a good one. I hope you will post more poems soon.

I feel every line in your poem is powerful & expressive, but I am not a big fan of so much repetition. Maybe a few repeats, but your message gets lost when every other line repeats for a long poem like this. It becomes distracting instead of being a point of emphasis. In my opinion, repetition should be used judiciously for a focused effect. This is just my opinion. Lots of poets repeat often like this (((HUGS)))