Mind Games

Just something I wrote for those of us who use our mind as an escape route

Alone in your room is where you have the most fun,

Lost in your mind where there are no wars to be won

Only games to be played and songs to be sung

An entire world to discover before we are done

Enter your mind and run with me

Into the sun and into a dream

Out in the world is what we most fear

The harsh reality of things very near

When the gunshots ring out and the bombs explode

Enter your mind and let it all go

Run through a field and lay on a cloud

Spin in a circle

Laugh and fall down

Let your cares fall and your worries fly away

Because this is the place

Where your mind goes to play

Author's Note

Please comment below. I appreciate constructive criticism, not meanness.

Reviews

[hcarson]

Really like this one bookworm, i like your style of poetry and the way it flows, i also enjoy the topics you choose thebwe can all relate too, you sum them up well, love it, full marks :)

[Declan Robison]

The rhymes and overall tempo of the piece really fit the theme well. Overall, I thought it was very nice!

[ANTO]

I added a review just as you deleted the write (it mentioned the oversight in the final line) !! :D
Here goes again though..
You describe the myriad of positives that our imagination affords us and God knows we need to escape (for free) now and again but lately I have seen the bad side with friends and relatives all being imprisoned by dementia and senility and one even to madness and delusions. Its a double edged-sword.

I think a single syllable word for worries like 'angst' flows better in the third last line.
Good job overall.

[BookWorm]

Thx! I'll definitely keep that in mind when I'm writing again. I'm not really a poetry writer, but I thought I'd give it a try.

[ANTO]

Well the rhythm is very smooth and the rhyming is spot on. Rhyming is hard. You did well.

[BookWorm]

lol thank you!!